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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
Falling lower, she dove into a wave disguised as her enemy The water submerged her worn, tired, damaged body The screamed words still rang in her ears, as the salt mixed with tears on her cheeks Her shattered heart spoke words in her head Words of anger and death She surfaced the wtaer with a lung-filling gasp She was blind to the swelll closing in on her Only seeing the, seemingly, never-ending tunnel filled with heartbreak, pain, anger and depression She let the wave crash on top of her She tumbled, turned and rolleed in her wave of depression Never breaking the surface for air |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Darkness~ This is very, very real ... great penning~ I may be a bit late, but let me welcome you to Passions~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
Thanks Marge!!! i apologise for my spelling errors... Yaknow how you just need to get it out and you tend to rush? Well that what happened. just doing what i do! Darkness Never be alone, let darkness and shadows be your friends |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
*shivers* chilling and great Vagabon the Lost One |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
very nice write! "So what befalls the flawless? |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
thnx for all ur replies every1 much appreciated You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
amazing write and the way you have written this has filled my head with images of someone being crushed by a massive wave...... i know what these feelings well and i dont think i have ever read something that depicts depression so vividly...... keep up the writing and keep posting... always here for advice Mel this is me.... like it or not.... |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Very nice flow. I really enjoyed reading it. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Jelfling Junior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 21Indiana |
This was a pretty cool poem, great imagery. Good job. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hey thanx every1 heaps wow wat you guys have sed has just totally inspired me! i wrote this poem in the middle of the night actually! i woke up from a dream of drowning and thought why did i ahve that dream and it just came to me. thanks heaps im going to go away and write a couple more keep rokin  darknessYou can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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