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RMelick
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since 2008-11-16

Posts 4

0 posted 2008-11-16 08:25 PM

Dear John Letter

To the east, the wall of dust closes in, untiring
in strength, it shortens the distance between. So isolated
from the rest of the world.  Sitting, on the guard,
waiting for the inevitable to occur.   Happiness
wrote her “Dear John” months in the past.
The job almost done, yet so far from complete.

Even after those famous words “Mission Complete”.
Sitting there, protecting the dirt, untiring
the thoughts of sleep with memories once past.
Completely removed from home, ever so isolated
to what once could be considered happiness
Just sit here and be the guard

What is so special that needs guarding?
The death of the land is a complete,
a wasteland, void of the fruits to bring happiness.
The sun beating down, the heat an untiring
strength, weakening its victims.  Feeling isolated
in this world where nobody can outrun the past.

The surrounding city built in past
times, protected once by an honorable old guard
A desert city, paradise at one time, yet isolated
from reality. This conflict will never be complete
The many kings still claiming the land.  An untiring
people that will never again be happy.

But this reality, this mind once happy
with thoughts of the personal past.
The present day needing that untiring
vigilance of this strong new guard.
To dream of the mission being complete
and peace to return to this land so isolated.

The new victims, a year returning home, isolated
once again, the dream of past happiness
long forgotten.  The death of the mind so complete,
filled with memories of the recent past.
Isolated, scared, invisible, the guard
never let down, the strength to survive untiring.

The untiring thoughts of isolation
The guard never dropping, never feeling happy
This mission incomplete, that haunting of memories once past

Pantheress
Member

since 2008-11-02

Posts 215
Queensland, Australia

1 posted 2008-11-16 08:58 PM

I really enjoyed reading your words.. thanks for sharing this with me.

RMelick
New Member

since 2008-11-16

Posts 4

2 posted 2008-11-17 06:10 PM

I have posted on these forums many many years back, and lost all the info for my account, so by no means am I new to this. This is a poem relating my experiences and would love for people to be critical of it. I am trying to workshop it and get it perfect. If you have some ideas, please let me know. I would like to perfect this.

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