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The path of a man without direction
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The path of a man without direction |
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Dr Gonzo Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 26 |
Crooked roads, unpaved, wandering aimlessly in circular motions Needleless compass, sailboat rocking, drowning ocean Youthful eyes burn with a need for direction Sitting idle, motionless in the middle of the intersection Tragedy of indecision decides to remain in station No matter what wisdom shall attempt to rock the foundation Tyger chasing tail Failure never chances fail Train on track Constantly derailed No destination No closure Just frustration The journey lingers on in limbo stage What lies at the end of this chapter Just a repeat of the previous page The man who puts too much stock in fate Will live a life in a stale mate Without direction or a plan The path chooses for the man |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Very nicely done! The imagery and semantics were articulate, with the subtle flip from beginning to end drawing my eyes back to the top to read again. |
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satin water passion Junior Member
since 2003-12-14
Posts 12Following the moon |
very nice. good representation of those aimless, hopeless, everything is futile feelings. With a nice hint of determination in the tone of the piece, which makes it sound more mature than the average "life sucks" poem. peace, andrew |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
kool, this caught my attention from start to finish, very nice, i likey liked it =) - River Love hurts as bad as it feels good. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: You definitely said a mouthful there! Enjoyed your perspective from start to finish. |
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