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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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torn up flower on the floor pass the broom pass the glue maybe we can fix her fix her broken heart pass the scissors maybe we'll just cut it out she'd be better off with out it dont you think? you've been in this spot before havent you.. pass the memories maybe you can get some closure if we help her help her help me.. pass the phone call 911 shes not coming back.. [This message has been edited by exhale (12-08-2003 12:18 AM).] |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
omg i am not just saying this but omg that poem is so sad i am on the brink of tears. i love how you made something like a broken heart fixable with scissors and glue. and the end was great to, not many poems have great endings but this one does amazing amazing stuff i can not get over it! wow   |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhh and yet the heart . . . has to mend on its own well done exhale |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
I must say I like your style. I feel that we share some similarities in our work, not may writers ask a question in thier posts almost like they are expecting a responce. The smaller font is something that I may have to steal from you, it serves more to accentuate that phrase rather than hide it. A+ |
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