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Maddy vanD
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 99
Newfoundland, Canada

0 posted 2003-12-05 07:08 AM

DYING SLOWLY

I dreamt of some far distant land
as our pleasure lay there bleeding
Out in the streets where the lovers died
they laugh, the pain's receding

Sat on the curb with your head in my hands
with the whole world ours for the asking
thinking back on those rum-soaked days
of summers everlasting

Play a hand and take your leave
do it for me, for those who grieve
with carefully chosen words
like an old song
that goes on and on
Dying slowly with your life before you
trying not to cry, love, trying to ignore you

And who among us will grow old
who'll be here come Victoria Day
Come on, cast the bones and read the runes
tell us what the spirits say

Take my hand I'm going now
the time has come for one last bow
and your whispered final words
go on and on
such a sad song
Dying slowly, please don't remind me
The night comes on, love, and life's behind me

Maddy
Poetry is not pretty....poetry is real

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

1 posted 2003-12-05 08:36 AM

Such a hurtful place to be in your emotions.

Love,
Terri~

Well I will go down with this ship
And I won't put my hands up and surrender...Dido

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2003-12-05 09:03 AM

nice

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

3 posted 2003-12-05 09:17 PM

EXCELLENT write, Maddy.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-12-06 07:46 PM

Maddy?

this IS brilliant
My God . . you took me there
to those streets . . .
xxoo

Paragon
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

5 posted 2003-12-07 09:53 PM

A poem full of emotion and very good rhythm as well, I empathize with you and pray we make it through these trying times in life. Nothing can seem so long as never, and nothing can seem so lonely as being surrounded by those who can't understand you.

Well written poem,
-Paragon

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

6 posted 2003-12-07 09:58 PM

WOW, I really don't know what to say...your poem is moving and impacting. Getting an extremely strong reaction out of people with words isn't exactly easy and you've done it.

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