DISTANT MESSAGE ON AN ANSWERING MACHINE

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Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

0 posted 2007-03-04 01:52 AM

So silent

So very distant

Your voice I can almost hear

Your anguish

I can always feel

My sorrow I shall always see

My death

It mingles with your voice

It tells me of your day, of the self-indulgence of your life

The uncaring you created to see the sun

To see the life you really believed to be behind the curtain that never was

The veil that concealed your soul

Concealed the horror

The regular person you had become

People in countries lay dying as you cry about your hair color

People in your own country lay dying as the man in front of you is belittled by the voice, telling him how bad he is at making a sandwich

Making a sandwich, as hundreds of people die of thirst

Making a sandwich as hundreds of people die of hunger

In the very same country you despise

Despise for not being as beautiful as you

Despise for never understanding that personal perfection IS the ultimate goal

A voice on an answering machine you become

Never understanding just why

Someone as pretty as you

How could anyone not want to be with you?

So pretty on the outside

So dark within

So sad that you never see the shadows

As they grow around you

So sad you never listen to the voice on the answering machine

Telling just why

You are so shallow

Telling you why no one truly cares for you

As innocence drown

As those that wish for a better life now wish for survival

As you complain about a sandwich

littlefairy
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since 2007-08-06

Posts 51
New York

1 posted 2007-11-29 05:20 PM

sadly alot of people are like the woman you just discribe somtimes im just like her. just try to be understanding of her even if shes not of you because its so hard being around someone you can't stand. well written.

I’m good during the day. But at night I wait.I wait for the one who’ll never return.

Mystress May
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since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

2 posted 2007-12-03 06:31 PM

Well written and I like how it all comes down to a sandwich. Something so mundane is turned into something huge.

Our scars are the foundation for what we have become

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

3 posted 2007-12-06 10:56 AM

littlefairy. I never knew the woman I was just waiting in line behind her.

As MM pointed out that is why it all boils down to the sandwich.

;-)

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

4 posted 2007-12-09 07:18 PM

i hate subway and i'll never eat there again. . . for $7.50 an hour, i would be a horrible sandwich maker, and would probably deal drugs in my spare time just to make ends meet

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

5 posted 2007-12-12 01:33 AM

Another masterpiece from the mind of Seeker..you do have the nack of entering beneath the vaneer that we two leggeds embalm ourselves in...well done lad.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

6 posted 2007-12-12 02:11 AM

Mr moondogz sire.

As always I thank you for your input.

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

7 posted 2007-12-18 02:30 PM

Humans are naturally complanitive creatures aren’t they?

Well-written work as all ways.

Thanks Abbeon

The hollow emptiness, the crazed thoughts left to survive

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

8 posted 2007-12-18 04:37 PM

where went Seeker
welder of words?
Looking for the wheels
that turn the mind
to generated poetry
of the darkest kind?

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

9 posted 2007-12-18 06:20 PM

All of a sudden I feel like eating a sandwich
lol...Nice write hun. although fairy misunderstood it give her a break a poem is supposed to make the mind wander even if it gets redirected into their own life, that is the power of a good poem it causes a variety of outlets...

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

10 posted 2007-12-19 12:40 PM

Thanks for the replies guys.

Mr Moondogz sire.

Nice little ditty I must say, work has kept me busy, yet your poem embalmed the very thoughts I had of your good self and MM.

Where have you been?

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

11 posted 2007-12-19 05:44 PM

I b here...just not writing or posting any poems lately...seems like there has to be an emotional component involved, otherwise I can't seem to get "into gear"....maybe something about Christmas...how about santa as the anti-christ? Think that might make a popular poetry challenge?

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

12 posted 2007-12-20 12:33 PM

I always thought the Internet was the Anti Christ but Santa seems like a more perfect fit... I mean the guy breaks and enters, eats your food and expects that because he leaves a gift it's all good?

It aint right I tells ya!

moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

13 posted 2007-12-20 07:51 AM

yeah, and the "gift" he leaves you have to pay for..how rude is that? Anyway, Merry Christmas.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

14 posted 2007-12-20 10:37 AM

Merry Christmas to you my good sir.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2008-01-12 08:06 PM

Nice writing...James

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

16 posted 2008-01-12 08:27 PM

Thanks James, glad you liked it.

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