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Dark Poetry #4

What became of life

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-10-15 03:22 PM

So far I have come, from the simple life which I dreamed once,
That now all I see are ends to shores without means to reach them,
Life often throws me in a jungle of dreams,
Dreams which are now my only reliefs,

As I wake up to what is around me once more,
A realization of life that I never chose before,
And as I breathe in the air that surrounds me,
It carries no sweet scent, of innocence as it once did,

No destination suffices this wretched soul,
For he seeks pleasure, that is never more,
When I close my eyes, I can sense nothing at all,
Lost in a world, that never wanted me more.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

Khatharsis
Junior Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 42

1 posted 2006-10-15 03:44 PM

This painted a very vague picture of unfullfillment and discouragement. Great useage of vocabulary and omagrey. Very nicely done.

P.S. Could ya show some love to my poem "Your Hand in Mind" whenever ya get the chance, would mean alot. Thnaks for shauring your poem with us.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

2 posted 2006-10-16 10:05 AM

Oh... This is so sad.

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silient all these Years, Tori Amos

pip_man
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

3 posted 2006-10-16 09:07 PM

I loved it. Great write! Glad I stopped into the dark poetry forum.

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

4 posted 2006-10-22 06:55 PM

I really like this poem. It's very sad=( though. But you did an awsome job on this. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing with us.

writergrl
Member

since 2006-10-30

Posts 73
Las Vegas, Nevada

5 posted 2006-10-31 03:23 PM

a melange of remorse and angst all rolled up into a most provocative piece, well done!

writergrl

"You cannot stain a black coat."
Nicholas Nickleby

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