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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Something to hold Someone to hold Feeling comfort, safety…….. warmth Feeling hatred Feeling pain Feeling…………… relief Strange…… warped So is this life we live in. Encounters with people The satisfaction that comes only through observation. The observation which feeds the hunger from within Despising, The feeling, Being under construction The specimen underneath a microscopic lens Feeding of humane misfortune Making life seem bearable Not knowing Yet wanting, needing to judge Feed off their pain. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! I loved this, I liked the "rhythm", except it didn't really have any, no offence, what I'm trying to say is that I liked the choppy way of reading this poem. How, this poem was punctuated and stuff. I enjoy reading it like that... Liked the content of the poem too, the "hunger", it's something, I belive, I can relate too... Very nice job, this was a pleasure to read  @-->--- |
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the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK |
'The specimin underneath a microscopic lens' - that was my favourite line; very powerful stuff. (I too enjoyed the choppy, jagged sort of rhythm, that was a nice touch) Where black, bleeding roses await the Thirteen, |
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