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Falling into Darkness |
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patsnod New Member
since 2006-04-21
Posts 1 |
ok i need to know what people think of it this is my Frist poem iv ever written. FALLING INTO DARKNESS Darkness possess my body and soul I am existing inside a black hole My life flashes through my mind Emptiness is what I find I try with all my might to make It back to the light but the endless night is winning this fight I start to pray for my life I just cant find the words to say darkness is empty and dead Life is light and alive! |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hi Patsnod, Welcome to PIP....  pls check your email for a special greeting this is a great first post, look forward to reading more.... Greeneyes~ And so it those we live with |
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Silent Prisoner Junior Member
since 2006-02-15
Posts 39Around Somewhere |
First of all; Welcome! This was a good first post. You have some awesome talent. Can't wait to read more. "I will give you my strength and my will to live strong." |
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Cherishable_Baybee Member
since 2006-01-04
Posts 57 |
Welcome to PIP i love your first write it was beautiful =D I also loved this line "Darkness possess my body and soul" because thats what im trying release my myself from. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
Welcome to PiP. Excellent first write. I liked the last line "Life is light and alive!" tis very true. Peace Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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