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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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'stay with me' she screams eyes wild and alight burning with contradiction wet with tears but the same deep blue you said you loved only moments ago 'i'll stay' you whisper eyes tight shut hands trembling behind you cold with sweat itching to say what you won't let your eyes say and pull her hard closer to you cause there's no way you can hold on when she's this beautiful and no way you could hold her when she's this beautiful and there's no way you could leave when she's all you have can you find me space inside your bleeding heart? |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I'm tempted to ask...what happened? What's wrong with her? Because you told such a story but left me hanging all the same. I love this jewel so much, it rocks. You rock. You're this beautiful. The ending was the best ending I've seen in such a long time. Thanks for this. And thanks for replying to mine  .CKVR. Come on God, do I seem bulletproof? |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
beautiful piece about loss? or love? either way painful... sorry, kinda sent me on my own interpretation for a minute... excellent write, enjoyed it much "i said 'How bout a revelution' and he said 'Right' i said oh, you say ah, i say revelution and you say ja,That was the craziest game of poker" |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
this is good yeah its left me thinking bout it as welll i really like this lor!!! miss u nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
made me think too... ah so brilliant. i really loved this. i'm so uber emotional today, don't even know why. i watched 13 going on 30 and it made me cry. *blush* *sigh* wish i could write like you. The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return. |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
I really enjoyed this. Great write. bgj |
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Annie78 Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 469here then there then back here |
this is really really great...and wish he could have read it before he left. Annie there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles |
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