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EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2004-12-05 02:41 AM

when the mirror eyes us back,
are we prepared to face the consequences?
we can place our hand there,
and touch ourselves, so to speak,
but when the coldness of the feeling hits us,
could we actually speak of what we see and feel?
i've often wondered which image looks away first.

i once decided the staring game should end,
and so i thrust my fist into the glass.
i noticed that we both bled,
mirrored each others pain, so to speak,
and although your image was more visibly shattered,
when i turned away this time, it was i
who was most broken.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-12-05 01:44 PM

Oh jeez, why must you do this to me? I'm in pieces at the moment, so to speak. Anything I write is not going to do this poem justice, nor the poet. This has possibly got to be my all time favourite poem, I hope you are proud of it Mike. I'm saving this, like I do to all your poems, so if my inspiration is lacking, I can read this again and again. It was beautiful and it feels sad, but....It was just so well written.
Love,
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-12-06 12:10 PM

Sounds like a fantasy vs reality thing. Or what you see and what is. Like the mind playing tricks on you or something like that.
Cool.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

3 posted 2004-12-06 09:30 PM

aaahhh *gasping for breathe*

this has left me breathless (teehee could you tell?)
i feel exactly like courtney - all your work is so dam powerful i start seeing green.

this one captured me and struck a few chords cus ive felt like this before.

trying so hard not to turn inot the green-eyed monster but ahhh you rock so hard

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

4 posted 2004-12-08 12:58 PM

Just about says it all.
What a remarkable poem!
& you are

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

5 posted 2004-12-08 10:34 AM

"when i turned away this time, it was i
who was most broken."

it hurts to realize how true this is. and it doesn't always take broken glass to figure it out. this was a hard on for me to read because it hits so close to home. hope your doing ok. Static
spritrider87@yahoo.com e-mail me whenever.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

Purity
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since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

6 posted 2004-12-09 12:01 PM

Brilliant! Oh Mike. The truest of true, this is the story of our lives.
Incredible wording, phrasing...everything!
I've spent a lot of time staring at that image. Hell, I even talk to it sometimes. And it has probably seen more of my tears that anyone else that knows me (except God).
You indeed hit a nerve, but damn this was great!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2004-12-09 12:04 PM

"i've often wondered which image looks away first."

I liked this much!

enjoyed

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2004-12-09 12:46 PM

I wanted to read again. This is what Sara and I are talking about. Feeling like losers. But we aren't its just a perception thing.
I'm wondering how Green darkness is talking. lol.

-GIS

let God ROAR,... in power...

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