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~K~
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since 2004-07-27
Posts 148


0 posted 2004-11-28 04:53 AM



dance lightly
on her
unmade grave
& expedite
contrition
a plethora of
now & thens
decorate her
wish list
chances are
that chances aren't
a flood of
unrequited loves
will wake
& smell
the rose that grows
& withers for
their pleasure

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2004-11-28 06:15 AM


chances are
that chances aren't


this is an all too familiar feeling...

enjoyed your words
M

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

2 posted 2004-11-28 03:31 PM


I absolutely love this ~K~  

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08
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Here, Now, Forever
3 posted 2004-12-06 07:23 PM


wow. there should be alot more replies to this poem. its amazing, the undiscovered gems you find here.
Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-12-07 09:23 PM


wow, cool, lol, confusing a bit, but still awesome.

hollow.
courtney. not in a capital letter mood today.

I've seen fire and I've seen rain
I've seen sunny days that I thought would never end
I've seen lonely times when I could not find a friend
But

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-12-08 11:24 PM


loved this!
powerful words.
hehe i can relate with courts in the fact it was a little confusing but thats kind of good as well right?

enjoyable read

congrats you should be proud

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
6 posted 2004-12-08 11:43 PM


...wonder if unrequited contrition still withers?...
This was amazing, as are all of your poems.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

muted
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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
7 posted 2004-12-09 11:09 PM


again, your words weaving stories of familiar characters unknown...and i enjoy that

1.Never dance lightly
2.Chances come cheap, so really doesnt matter what will happen...always more chances
3. A rose that lived and then withered even at the expense of someone elses pleasure...is still more beautiful and more fulfilling than a rose made of plastic collecting dust and never fading. (yes, metaphorically AND literally)

enjoying you

~K~
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since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

8 posted 2004-12-10 10:29 AM


Thank you all so much for responding to my chaos. I assure you it is more confusing to me if anyone.

What does not wither?

& muted, it is so good to hear from you. You have proved yourself to be a remarkably talented & insightful individual. I would love to get a e-mail from you sometime. My address is Xerielle@aol.com.

muted
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9 posted 2004-12-12 01:36 PM


i blush at the compliment, and i thank you

and, please check your email

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