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The flames will eat your soul.
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The flames will eat your soul. |
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NightFall Member
since 2004-01-28
Posts 88The land known as England 
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the flames are eating at my soul whats left is nobodys guess its yours for the taking theres no mistaking that you will take the final piece of me that has survived the flames eating at my soul. Everything i had has been taken everything i have will be the taker will be you and you alone for only you would need two hearts one isnt good enough i doubt you even have one go on take it you need it more than me your a heartless lonley person in fact your joining me your joining me in the place where the flames eat your soul and every wish you ever wanted everything you ever needed all of you once beautiful lust you and your feelings of hope will be turned to dust "My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
This poem rocked. But the flames will eat... sounds kinda fake. If that were so the poem would have never been born. Just one of any tips, to think about... -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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NightFall Member
since 2004-01-28
Posts 88The land known as England |
All tips are appreciated, thanx "My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere. |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Dear Nightfall This was a fantastic piece! I loved it! I could sense the anguish, the bitterness, and boy can I relate! Keep writing my friend, as it is in this that we misunderstood artists find our deepest comfort. Sylvia |
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