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Sikanda
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since 2002-10-08
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0 posted 2004-10-23 09:26 PM


this is a song I wrote for my band forgotten. its sorta based on Crossfades song "so far away"
tell me what you think!!

Verse 1

I've been changing inside
while you've stayed the same
I've been spreading my wings
while you've stayed on the ground
And you refuse to see
What I truly am
And I refuse to go through this again!!

Chorus

I'm not going to play the role you've prescribed for me
Or let you make yourself out to be -- "the real injured party"
Or let you make me feel guilty~
When your the one thats done me wrong
(Now) your control over me is gone...

Verse 2

Say what you think I should hear
(blah, blah, blah) its all the same
empty words to my ears -- and I refuse
once again -- my choice
Not to play your silly game
(cuz) I'm moving on
while you watch me disapear
I'm starting a new life
so far away from here!
(SO FAR AWAY FROM YOU!!

Verse 3

I've been changing inside
while your still wrapped up in your self-hatred
(and I'm tired of you taking out on me!)
I'm letting go of all the lies
and you still think everythings OK
And you still refuse to see
to take a look at your true identity --

So now I'm letting go of you --
and all I used to be --
and all you've put me through...

[This message has been edited by Sikanda (10-25-2004 01:14 PM).]

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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
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1 posted 2004-10-24 12:26 PM


Wow, I thought it was beautiful, cool wording, I bet it makes a cool song!

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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2 posted 2004-10-24 12:45 PM


I would just love to hear this with the music.
really cool...

~Alli~

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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
3 posted 2004-10-24 08:32 AM


I Liked It Too, And It Seems Like It Would Be A Great Song.....Well Done

I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~

Much Luv,
~!~"Trina"~!~

Sikanda
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since 2002-10-08
Posts 54

4 posted 2004-10-25 01:12 PM


Thanks I'm glad you like it. I think it makes a great song too! Hopefully one day my band and I can record it!
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