Which of the Two Shall I Be?

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Dark Poetry #4

Which of the Two Shall I Be?

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

0 posted 2004-10-22 10:37 AM

Which of the two shall I be?
A pacer on floors wearing worn out carpet?
A married mortal under midnight with nothing but worries?
Like two single digits in an arithmetic problem
Multiplying children rambling lost in the minds of others
While the original two digits remain in the same place
Or hide the wedding gown
Handcuff the children before they're born
Understand the misunderstood full moon
Having complete control of nothing and loving every minute of it
Reproduce caveman enemies leaving backwards directions behind
You're surrounded by jealous gods.

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Re-post back to my first day here
Reminded me what my password was,
so I decided to give it thanks.
Rider

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-10-22 06:54 PM

I like I like. Whoa, nice work, very powerful and thought provoking. I like!

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-10-22 08:50 PM

Thats pretty cool. Enjoyed.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

3 posted 2004-10-24 09:57 AM

I Enjoyed It Too...

Happiness Runs From Me, For I Am It's Enemy, Anyone Who Has It, Is Someone I Envy...

Much Luv,
"Trina"

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-10-24 01:17 PM

I was blown away by the originality of this piece.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

5 posted 2004-10-27 11:35 PM

Now that was indeed deep.
I love how this one flows, Rider.
Kinda lost me on the last line, but then I must ponder it awhile. The poem was very well crafted, very interesting, and again, indeed deep.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

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