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Did I deserve this?
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
I'm sick of all the hours, I've spent. Holed up in my room Going over the things we've said. The everythings to me The nothings to you. I'm sick of all Those times, You've made me cry Trying to rid my body Of the toxins that compel me to you. The dark days In which I wanted To die. Anything to lessen The gaping wound, From which my blood flows freely Pouring out of my soul That you torment every day. Do I deserve this? Who are you to control me? Yet I appointed you, And now I pay For the foolish mistakes Of the past. [This message has been edited by vampiana (10-06-2004 01:09 AM).] |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
originally this was part of another poem, but then the poem seemed to run on too long, so i cut it in half and it formed two balanced poems! the other half of it is "I hate you so much, I love you" or something like that, I've momentarily forgotten, anywho...I better be going, I'm gonna stop talking now. I mean.. now... "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
ouch kirsty. this has left a feeling in my stomach, and im not joking. wow best i think, ive ever seen u write. loved it wow. beautiful. i cannot explain. lol and this is dark beautiful, like i explained in courts poem. wow LOR put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
No, you dont deserve it, but growth is essential for your soul. Even like this. beautiful writing. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I'm running out of great replies. I can't say much else now. I love your poems, and this is no exception. It was....dark beautiful. Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
"Never run dry... YOU!..." (still singing from the last post). I so admire your writing and how it shares genuine pain and yet you still have the ability to love. Another great write from your soul. Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I have been there b4, in fact this poem sort of reminds me of a poem i have written on here before, called "monster" or sumthing close to that, i cant really remember... I really love this one... Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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