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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-09-25 04:19 AM

The bottom of my mind is polished marble,
Easy to slip and slide,
And above me as I sit inside there,
Silence, with it’s addictive sound,
Is broken.

The hollow dripping of my blood,
Forms a film of red,
The marble is disappearing,
And I am drowning, sinking,
Slipping and sliding.

In these thoughts as they flood my mind.

Empty brown eyes flicker open,
Mind is overflowing with blood red thoughts,
Seeping out of my eyes,
Mistaken for tears,
…Flicker shut

Painted on interest disintegrates,
Lips quiver with anxiety.

Bitten by a haunting idea,
The poisoned blood red thoughts spread,
Through the bruised looking veins,
Shake my head,
Shake my head,
Flicker open, Flicker shut.

Passing wave, no need for me anymore,
Too many thoughts
Too many ideas,
Too many questions,
Too much blood to pore, in one sitting.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

1 posted 2004-09-25 04:36 AM

wow. some awesome imagery in there. kinda spooky, which makes it even better!

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

2 posted 2004-09-25 04:46 AM

wow. some awesome imagery in there. kinda spooky, which makes it even better!

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

3 posted 2004-09-25 10:33 PM

WOW! I love the
"The bottom of my mind is polished marble,
Easy to slip and slide..." part. that is so cool that you could even think of wording it like that, then to have so much detail with it...I love it, Awesome job!

~*brezee*~

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

4 posted 2004-09-26 12:13 PM

When the marble slips away insanity sets in. Nice work.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-09-26 02:04 AM

this aches -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

6 posted 2004-09-26 02:16 AM

awsome.

cant say anything new so wow i loved it

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

symphony_of_thoughts
Member

since 2003-08-03

Posts 95
Somewhere

7 posted 2004-09-26 04:19 PM

I liked this, describes when an obsession of ideas flood in and take control. Flows nice and holds together, when I write I usually jump around too much.

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