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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
No one has noticed, The tears I’ve bled Because I shed them all alone. No one has seen, The way I hide Because I’m hidden. I’m starting to wonder if anyone, Has noticed anything Wrong, Or do I conceal It all so well When I crawl away each day. My mind feels empty and it wanders far When I cast my gaze to oblivion All I see is the white When I know it is black all around And then I focus The black comes into view I was lost for a while No matter, I know my place, And can feel the walls again Instead of wandering in circles Instead of seeing new things When I know I have seen them before. When I lose my place like that My head becomes my world, my forever Don’t rock the boat. The dark seeps through the pages, The blots of ink, of thought They disappear, and the white is my empty. I can feel the roughness of the darkness It holds me tight, But with nothing behind my forehead There is nothing to colour my world, And nothing to see but white. I must be blind No. Because I can see When they turn off my light, my sky, my world Because I can see When they take me back to reality Because I can see When they wake me up To this blackened world. (Author's note, To me this is three poems. Three different poems, but I wrote them as one. I suppose it is about that empty feeling in my head. Well let me know what you think.) I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
this is cool, I like it..It has a lot of detail and imagery which is awesome...great job!  ~*brezee*~ |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
loved it. another awesome poem by you Courtney. I especially like the first stanza, i really really related, its like you took the thoughts out of my head, and put them into words. AWESOME STUFF, keep writing, i always look forward to your poems. Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
wow ur amazing. absolutely amazing. reading your poems makes me feel amazing. reading them is my privilege. *breaks into an incubus song that goes by that name* - sorry yet again im in that well known incubus mood. sorry, but wow AMAZING LOR say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Hollow Emtienss, thank you for writing this. I needed to see something like it and it describes my situation perfectly. I keep backslidding and I do need to stop. Black and white, do or don't. Thank you. -GIS He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11 |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
No problem GIS, thanks for replying guys! I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Courtney: this is brilliant! When I lose my place like that My head becomes my world, my forever Don’t rock the boat. The dark seeps through the pages, The blots of ink, of thought They disappear, and the white is my empty. I can feel the roughness of the darkness It holds me tight, My God, yes! Sometimes a lil' scary going into myself in that way beautiful writing . . . |
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