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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-12-05 08:11 AM

i weep
with each
sunset,
vanish
behind
violet curtains,
bruised and
anemic,
withering
in the
fallout,
uncertain
of daybreak,
burdened
with
yesterday,
descending
in a spiral,
let the dawn
breathe
my shadow

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-05-2003 08:14 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-12-05 08:14 AM

inkedgoddess
A good write and I enjoyed the read.

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2003-12-05 08:49 AM

well done

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

3 posted 2003-12-05 09:07 AM

I just love how you have worded this. What a beautiful mental picture for my rainy days! ~K~

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

4 posted 2003-12-05 03:39 PM

Let the dawn breathe my shadow....great line

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2003-12-05 03:40 PM

Silky...James

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2003-12-05 04:38 PM

thanks for reading kids

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2003-12-05 04:58 PM

inkedgoddess - and the dawn will come to breathe in your shadow...

BC

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-12-06 08:22 PM

(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, the dawn shall come so prepare to lift your wings and enlarge that shadow until it vanishes softly! (big angel hugs) You keep growing leaps and bounds, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michele, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

9 posted 2003-12-08 12:16 PM

oh the darkness that still surrounds you! Let's pray together for the light to come soon!

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-12-08 12:29 PM

i weep
with each
sunset,
vanish
behind
violet curtains,
bruised and
anemic,
withering
in the
fallout,
uncertain
of daybreak,
burdened
with
yesterday,
descending
in a spiral,
let the dawn
breathe
my shadow

~ Depressive, yet very impressive! You were able to convey the sense of descending in a downward spiral. Effectively presented on the page and very descriptive writing.
Each line was a gem, Dear Goddess!

"let the dawn breathe my shadow" ~ nothing short of brill!

~ May the sun lift the veils and lighten up your world!