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The Limiting Factor
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The Limiting Factor |
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viney New Member
since 2003-12-02
Posts 3 |
The Limiting Factor The clouds, the mountains. That range, in every sunset. Obscuring the orange as it fades around us. The Dark blue dome of Blackness. Keeping the demons from us all. Protecting us, Keeping us down. My dreams bounce back As they try, to fly, to the moon Remind me of life, And love. And all I really have to lose. So I walk with blind precision. And purpose. Confident at times. While others I’m lost. Caught inside, All the questions in my mind As time slips round the dome. As black as the nothing I have in my heart. A filter for everything, I have to hold inside My mind or my soul. Which do I answer to? Alive I’m told. I choose with cultured tones. Squeezing these feelings. Just to fight another day. My limiting factor, I dream. Will one day, slip away. In time I decide I will not be denied Helpful and useful This change inside We fight off the nature, That’s inside of our minds Turn back to reflections. We want to incline. In hell we can dwell, On what we once saw. All the nothings we thought. As we all stood, And gawped |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
There are many excellent thoughts and images that you protrayed very nicely. I just don't know if I like your final word choice. "gawped" just seems to downplay the rest of it. Just my opinion. Great job, though! -*-*- |
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viney New Member
since 2003-12-02
Posts 3 |
Yes can't help but agree with you. it's bugged me for a while that last line. thanks for your input. |
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