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Stroke of Blush
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Stroke of Blush |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ A stroke of blush caressing my cheek my mouth curves in soft sweeps dusting the surface with passion hinting at what used to be. But my smile is lost in the mirror escaping my own reflection along with that part of you that turns away and I wonder why I bother with perfume. Perhaps to remind me when you came close enough sharing the same desire pleasures worn with intent. Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful. ~*~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
lori, this is just so beautiful and soft, as always your words just float together in the most wonderful flow...I sometimes find myself lost thinking in your words, and that's a really good thing. take care amy  "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Perhaps to remind me when you came close enough sharing the same desire pleasures worn with intent. Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful.'''' ~~ LORI~ awwww sweet lady, how beautiful is this??? sigh...you have such a way of pulling emotions from any reader....soft gentle grace, thats how I see you... hugssssss ~~**~~ |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
"But my smile is lost in the mirror escaping my own reflection", this is deepening and is appealing. I thouroughly enjoyed the entire essence of this write. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautiful my friend, and the "you" part of "we", in there, will always be beautiful to my eyes, and I'm sure to all in Passions. jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"and I wonder why I bother with perfume. Perhaps to remind me when you came close enough sharing the same desire pleasures worn with intent. Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful." Perfectly phrased Lori..much enjoyed this read. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful. beautiful touch here, blondilocks, the whole poem floats |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
You've found a beautiful way to describe a lost love. We do try to hold on to those "moments when we were beautiful", don't we? KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...The beauty one see in a lover's face looking with love, truly does make one feel beautiful. Wonderful poem! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Your fortune cookie, maam, compliments of Jamie: Hold to the beautiful, believe in the hope, and all this will come to you. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You've had a stroke of blush now I understand....and perhaps a reminder that you are beautiful, the real kind that lives inside and may never show at the surface, but shines through in your poetry. Smile, blues lady! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Why, when I read this, do I think of words like gossamer, and breeze, and twilight, and silk... I think you are wonderful at bringing out feelings and thought and images with your writing. Its very beautiful, and it shows that you have not ever lost the "when we were beautiful". He did. Hugs Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Perhaps to remind me when you came close enough sharing the same desire pleasures worn with intent. Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful Lori, this part is so very true.... a couple in love is so beautiful that it makes the couple beautiful, too. Hugs to you, my friend  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the ending  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
always love the 'when we were' |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade A lovely write. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I wonder why I bother with perfume. This phrase really stands out for me. It evokes remembered scents... Your words are so evocative balanced with delicacy. I find myself reflecting on my past as I wonder along with you in your sweet [bittersweet] reverie ~C |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wrapped up in the moment when we were beautiful. This whole poem touches me... but especially these lines... I ached to be thought beautiful But such a fate wasn't for me Still, even I have known beauty Within the magic of WE... And it changes what's in the mirror For I'm not seeing just my plain face I'm seeing the glimpse of heaven You gave me that time can't erase Whatever the future brings me Even when I'm all alone The beauty of us will surround me Ours, but never my own. Sorry, Bluesy one... the fingers got carried away. *S* I do love your poem... hope you don't mind! *S* |
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Brad_Smith Member
since 2004-01-09
Posts 70Dallas, Texas |
suthern, i love your rework of the piece. Ours, but never my own. The best gifts and treasures are shared ones. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Blusey - you sure write'em well... BC |
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