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Open Poetry #30

Quick One in a Slow Place

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-12-19 01:17 PM

The wind catches my collar
And slips down my spine
Chills skin into a pallor
And chips at my mind
Too cold for the thinking
Weave between frozen ponds
To a place of slow drinks
With warm stool to sit upon.

At first it’s almost tasteless
But warms the insides
With a glow in the darkness
As it gently there does ride
Then walking off now bold
Coat tightly wrapping me
Against the onslaught of cold
Hurry off to elsewhere be.

Stopping to taste a Wild Irish Rose
Pausing to escape winter wind blows

Gloom

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2003-12-19 01:30 PM

well done Proff.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2003-12-19 01:33 PM

Gloom -- I drink in your libation as you make admirable recitation and wonder what it'd be like to be where you were that night...........BEEEEwell!

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

3 posted 2003-12-19 01:33 PM

Bracing!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-12-19 02:35 PM

Excellent Professor.
Very much enjoyed!
Hugs~

~Let peace begin with me...

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

5 posted 2003-12-20 03:27 AM

P.G.,
  "And slips down my spine
   Chills skin into a pallor
   And chips at my mind"

This sends chills, and I feel
the chisel chipping bits

Your words are always placed with such
care to give just the emotion you desire.
What a master you are.  You continue to amaze me.

After re-read, I just had to comment on this part--I liked how you showed the fortitude to grow.

    " At first it’s almost tasteless
      But warms the insides
      With a glow in the darkness
      As it gently there does ride
      Then walking off now bold"

                 Merry Christmas.
                  Sadie

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (12-20-2003 09:50 AM).]

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