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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-11-17 01:47 PM


You are the forbidden swan
who has swum into my lake
the waters of my life
which once held waves of turmoil
now remain still and calm
in your presence
as your wings glide on the water
I feel you beauty
touch my intermost being
and wish for a love
that can never be
for you are the graceful swan
so beautiful your form
so perfect your movement on the water
that at times I forget everything
my problems
worries
and start to enter the water
to swim to you
then I see my reflection
and retreat into the solitude
of loneliness
for you are too beautiful for me
and if the most gallant swan
is unworthy
then what of me
for I am just a lonely creature
hiding in the darkness
so scold me not
for loving you from my shadow
for it is all I can
in a love never ment to be
and where there is no tommorow.


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Margherita
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1 posted 2003-11-17 01:55 PM


Dear Brad Majors, this is so sad, but also so beautiful.
If this is personal, I would say don't be so pessimistic. The swan may see a swan in you too!
Love, Margherita

EvocativeVerse2
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2 posted 2003-11-17 02:36 PM


LOVED IT! Enough said.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-11-17 02:37 PM


This is beautifully written.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Brad Majors
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4 posted 2003-11-17 02:39 PM


thank you
Earth Angel
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5 posted 2003-11-17 08:28 PM



It seems as though this swan swimming into your life has brought out a different facet of your poetic talent. This was simply loverly!

~ May the graceful swan truly see the man of grace before her.


EA

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6 posted 2003-11-17 08:43 PM


quote:
so perfect your movement on the water
that at times I forget everything
my problems
worries
and start to enter the water
to swim to you

DANG! I'm keeping this one in my pond.

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