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'Til there was you.........(wranxies masky Raid)
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'Til there was you.........(wranxies masky Raid) |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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Flash the smile toe the line in bite of lip- I'm feeling fine Sucked the sour -tequila shot of couldn't win... of never stopped. The flip of hip unreadable I guess this empty is treatable? a braying laugh "whatever..." in sigh the distant look unreachable a sidled slip of earnest yearn a lashing eye the cheeks to burn buy you a drink? what do you think? A funhouse moor -closed eyes in bear I play the game so drop your stare In Love? HA...I never dared now shush! I love this part- "....till there waaaasss youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu...." I know...I know....this is albino....cringe I tried..Bri [This message has been edited by brian sites (11-16-2003 01:22 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hmm an earnest effort from an Albrino. This, my friend, is far better than you know. (Or will take credit for) I'll let m'witch tell you for herself. Bri dude! thanks for showing up all decked out. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am BLUSHING here! I KNEW IT ALL ALONG. You ARE me. (Iamyou) oh baby...you have "done" me wickedly wonderfully! Are you sure I didn't write this? GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEGIDDY! sighing satisfied... somebody understands me (sigh. edited for discretion? wince. but YOU know.)   [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-16-2003 02:37 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
uhhhh . . . K? I think you need a shave . . . *smiling here* OMG . . that kinda freaked me out I was reading YOU and looking at Bri yes, this IS you Brian, what a beautiful challenge well met, far and beyond You have captured her OMG so well I actually heard HEARD her say that to you in the last lines . . . *smiling here* Hugs to you guys  xxoo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Bri?...this is amazing... you've done her perfectly Agreeing with Sue here...I could HEAR her, especially in those last lines...smile. From the first words on, there was no question... you DO know how to do the witch...grin Hugs, you... When the power of love overcomes the |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 'scuze me folks. I'm just vicariously fulfilling a particular need to have Bri on top about now...  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Carry on...grin |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
wickedly wonderful works for me...  |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bravo! Loved it...back to the top it goes. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You win first place. THIS IS Karen. You have captured her beautifully! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
breathing my sista . . . |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
my god I knew it after the first line. you sound JUST like her. grins. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
can't stop reading this - I FEED. I like me so much better thru your eyes--you make my rough edges seem...okay. truly blessed, I am. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
here . . I will be selfish for the both of you *smile* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well witch..he did what I told you I couldn't..lol.. and he did it well.. very well.. Bri.. hats off bud.. this reads so much like ser, that I had to blink..make sure I had read the thread correctly..and then, read it again... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
This needs another trip to the top... I can be selfish too...smile Love you both... When the power of love overcomes the |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, Brian, are you for sure that you aren't her???  This is amazing, Sir. I do think that you know her very well. I'll bet that you study her like Gary does me, don't you? LOL Hugs to you both Ethel |
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