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Devotion |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Here lies obscurity, caught in the palm of my hand.. That which keeps me warm in pallid winter, as shield from the savage January gusts. Oh, how devotion chills the bones.. The vines careen to their timid death, a temporary glimpse of the spine that cannot withstand the burden of growth. To think that once, these flowers touched the sky. The taste is still bitter, the echo more repetitive. Time, without conscience, bellows nocturnal hymn, confessing it's impurity and hatred for itself. Here lies the tranquility of chaos, inside the pupil of dispair. Orbiting the dwelling lullaby, that grants us no rest. For it just may be too cold to sleep. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
brilliant |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kaoru Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
'Tis not that cold yet, m'dear... and please, go to the Challenges Forum, see Wranx' challenge. It would be fitting for you to play the game. Cannot wait until I see who you become.  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
K-You have an astounding ability to build images with your words of those thoughts and feelings we all long to express. Thank you. I especially love this: "The vines careen to their timid death, a temporary glimpse of the spine that cannot withstand the burden of growth. To think that once, these flowers touched the sky." ~K~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Here lies obscurity, caught in the palm of my hand.. as if a thorn unable to fester for I have no rejection of this foreign shard and am left with only its prick at tender when I in attempt to grasp something more substantial than dream close this part of me around more I would pull it free but can not stand the scar that in leaving is created |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Cpat - Exactly. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Kaoru... not exactly perhaps..but an essence of what I took from yours... you build a structure around the idea that is unique to your own voice, and in it, to some degree create an entity that appears it would crumble..if one less word was used or be crushed by one more... you have talent kid... real talent for building images and feelings one on top of the other... and creating art in the process. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The taste is still bitter, the echo more repetitive. Time, without conscience, bellows nocturnal hymn, confessing it's impurity and hatred for itself. This was like life under a microscope, examined in it's entirety, disease, remorse yet, granuals of hope spreading and overtaking what was, and is.... Talent? More so, an awareness of so much going on around you...when you write a book would you let me know, cause I'll be the first in line if I can...not only to purchase, but to also get your signature...for one of the best keepsakes in my life. Your brilliant. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Meghan~ 'The taste is still bitter, the echo more repetitive. Time, without conscience, bellows nocturnal hymn' My, oh my ... look at this entire beauty of poetic perfection~ You know what ? I think you and CPat should duet~ My God ... the possibilities~ Think about it~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
RON...MEG..DUet... NOW! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Raph... megs style is far more complex than my own... I'm afraid I would drag her into pure boredom.... the lady has talent... don't try and saddle her with my mere ability to BS... and expect her to write and enjoy it.. give her a break.. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Stunning! Eric |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Meghan, devotion shouldn't be so complicated as it really isn't, devotion should be more than just helping someone out, but also helping yourself out! (big hugggssssss) Rest should be part of it, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
awe, beautiful it is  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ron i don't think you heard me..DUet grins |
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