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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Oilskin still covered them Dog eared books showing water stain And abrasion from being banged about In old Jeeps and canoes As I had carried them as if they Were in some way the key To my understanding what happened Then to me and to the world. The volumes pages Once white now had yellowed And the lines written in them Seemed to desecrate the idea That once there was more than this Just lines, letters and words strung Down a page to those times. I opened one And saw in my mind you Standing there in morning sun A stretched yawn Half dressed in temptation To never go on Never leave this place we’d found I remembered then And turned the page “You swept in this day as if a front had moved and I was to be the clouds that piled at the edge waiting for the thunder hoping for your wind.” They close as easily as they open But the thoughts don’t seem to be As bound by covers or wrappings No matter how tightly tied I found the last Half filled still with empty pages That had not been cursed by my pen. It was the one I was writing in When it all came to an end The you The me Turning to the last written page I found the words in your hand “In every time to begin lies an end not yet seen.” To my own nodding I pulled a pen And scribbled below it “In every end there lies a new place to let the heart mend.” Perhaps I need to buy a new set of journals And let the mend be a new begin. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Once I got to the end I had to go back and reread. The last line got me of course.. There is so much I want to say about this piece...yet I seem to be at a loss for words..your writing does that. You make every female that reads you, want it to be about them..  Off to adult now...lol Susan |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
“You swept in this day as if a front had moved and I was to be the clouds that piled at the edge waiting for the thunder hoping for your wind.” ~*~ I enjoyed it all... but this spoke so well of nature, both above, and within... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Well, I can't say the same to Susan's words b/c I don't feel that way, the part about wanting your words to be about me, I don't feel that way when I read the poetry of others, but this is an exceptionally beautiful write. But what I do gain from this, is that you are an excellant poet...writing from the heart, soul and mind...and the gal it is about...well sir...may your dreams blend into an even rhyme. Thank you kindly for sharing, you are very talented and bravo!!  This was stunning |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing poet sir...just amazing! ~Hugs~
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan... thank you my friend... you are kind Sunshine... thank you dear lady.. you know I always enjoy your comments. Lee.. you be careful or you'll make me blush.. ( chuckling) your kind words are greatly appreciated...and I never thought every woman wanted the words to be about them.. or to them.. I just figure the words are there...and sometimes someone finds something in them to touch a place..or a memory..or a thought Nancy... you slipped in while I was posting this... thank you dear one...I'm glad you found some enjoyment in this.. thank you all... [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (09-24-2003 01:46 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yes, get some more journals, but as you connect the train of thought to the next border, may that final page be left open so the thought can continue to be scribbled on the cardboard back cover! (big hugggssssss) I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Can letting go be this way? I would hope so...this is filled with sadness, regret, and longing. And a bittersweet goodbye... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is filled with sadness and loss of heart, but it is felt from within your soul and it touches as it's read. Crystal |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ron, my friend... Once again, you amaze me... excellent, poet sir. Hugs,  ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wonderful Ron, it's always a pleasure to read you Sir  Maree. fate is not just |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I... have to save this... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is amazing not sure how I missed it the first time.....strong words and use of imagery..... ME~ There's a song inside my soul |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Clap! Clap! CLap! Wonderful Cpat. It is not just women though that can relate to this one. I definitely can relate to it! This is so well penned it made me want to write myself at this very moment. Bravo I say! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, My journal is my mind. It has its advantages. LOL Well done and enjoyed. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Lee.. you be careful or you'll make me blush.. ( chuckling) your kind words are greatly appreciated...and I never thought every woman wanted the words to be about them.. or to them.. I just figure the words are there...and sometimes someone finds something in them to touch a place..or a memory..or a thought Hiya and Good Morning to ya....geeze, I'm very sorry, I didn't mean to imply that you thought that, it's just when I read Susan's words, it never dawned on me that way. When I read others poems, they make me so happy when they're love poems, and brings warmth to my heart...but never did I wish that they're words were written for me...not saying it would be nice....but it's something that never dawned on me???? Maybe I should think more like that? And yes, indeedy, feel the same way about my writing...the part where you wrote, hope that your words touches the hearts of many... I'm very sorry, didn't mean to incinuate that you thought that way. I thought that was a very nice comment which Susan left...intreging and somethin to think about. Smiles and hugs hope there is no harm done...one of my faults is thinking out loud, when I'm curious and don't quit understand. ????? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lee.... no worries mate...lol... no need to over think my reply or yours...as no offense was taken nor was any damage done in any way.... |
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