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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Someone said “To be just 5 minutes, inside your head.” And I had to laugh When those words I read… For 5 minutes is but a moment And then again a lifetime too Would you see the minutes of chaos? Or feel the blank stare as tired I grew? Could you stand the passing sigh Lost to you many years ago? Is the thought of being shy create surprise you had to show? How about the ugly? the apathy and disdain That crawls around my waking mind As I try to keep my sanity but end up being blind? What about the fears of death and being found To be such a hypocrite you would surely drown? Could you stand the single thread Once it was pulled so tight That matter not the time of day You obsess to do it right Can the madness that is me Be condoned within your heart If you find that in the end being devious is my art? I think perhaps I’ll pass On giving guided tours For you’ll find no place in my mind As interesting as YOURS [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (09-23-2003 05:54 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I believe it was I, Ron, who replied to your last post with those words... and, even after reading this, the answer is still YES! ...I would. But, no guided tour please... just kind of let me wander...  ~Hugs, Nancy~
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nancy... yes I knew who it was... ( chuckling) and believe me..it is a compliment..but then I thought again..what a nightmare for you to really see me as I am... the self pity.. the greed, the lies, the things inside I hide..and try to put a face on... scary... to think one might be found out... hugs my friend... your compliment was taken as just that... a compliment and one of the highest order... the poem.. my reflections on what would it be like to not be able to hide... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ron~ This actually made me laugh... Do you actually think you are so different from the rest of us? We all hide the bad and ugly. You, my friend, underestimate yourself and always have. You are a wonderful man...a great listener and very, very forgiving... I wouldn't want it anyother way... Susan |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I say you are worth standing in line for. and I've been inside yer head, (it looks a little like Willy Wonka's chocolate factory, folks, but SWEETER) smile. I'll take a season pass please.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I'd like a tour please. Ummm...wait till I take my Zoloft. lol. Seriously...your writing is awesome. I agree with my sister Enchantress fully! hugs, Chris Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I too believe the most special blessing of all is to have a mind of your own, and though I agree with all you say, I too am amazed with all you write and I would love to always visit your mind! (big hugggsssssss) Just love your perceptions, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Heck, I'd settle for five minutes in my own head right now, if I could go there alone.....let alone one as fascinating as yours! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
But what about those good five minutes... when you are thinking of those sheer shivers that you weave and leave behind so well? |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Oh how i love you. You never fail to make me laugh and feel so much sadness at the same time. I'd still take a walk around your loaf (head) but I think i'd take self defence lessons first. It sounds much like my own. ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
They one wrote a song about this.... "Magical Mystery Tour"... at least I think it was a song....age sometimes overcomes me and ... where was I? |
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IrishDreamer Member
since 2003-10-18
Posts 55Kansas |
There are a few minds I would like a tour of although i'm not sure i'm ready to give tours of my own. I enjoyed this one very much. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Just human. Human frailties like us all. Love, Terri~  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
How did that song go "...a threeee-hour tour...." I'd go for that (mine or yours or anyone else's) as long as I could be sure our tiny ship wouldn't leave us marooned anywhere! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
incredibly written...my answer would be yes as well, we all have our hours of maddness, and silly little quirks....but love is love. And is not just felt when it's easy to love, but also when it's difficult...I believe those difficult times are what should draw two closer together????? But that's just silly ol me? Good one! Thanks for writing and sharing. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah... If we could spend five minutes inside the mind of another - Whose WOULD it be?...  ... Interesting... |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Ron ... a fascinating poem and I too wonder whose head I would like to crawl inside. Hmmmm? Lots and lots of choices. I hear you're coming our way. Unfortunately, I will not be available to meet with you .... darn it! Our daughter is having surgery when you are here. However, if you're ever this way again, please let us know. I'll miss meeting you ... hugs, Marti |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I got news for you.I'll take one of your tours anytime. Crystal |
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