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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Reposted because they're talking about it over in Critical Analysis Fading there is no stunning blast, no earthquake sudden rending severation of the soul no fall so relieving as a rockslide down a canyon wall no, it is closer more eroding than the realignment when the closest dearest friend has said “acquaintance” and more threatening than than the unease as you notice after all these years a wall is very slightly out of line more subtle than the small distress, there on the warming sand while waves break with tones of the eternal symphony, that the song has never been for you yet it yearns more personal and somehow less significant than the scrape dry turning turning of an empty tumbleweed down the drywashes of time and hollow as the understanding that although the weed is wearing stick by stick the prairie has no end [This message has been edited by Ratleader (10-16-2003 01:52 AM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I know that feeling... I know this life... Well done, I like this alot. Hurts, too true, but I like it...alot. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PIP picked a nap time designed to tax my patience to the max. *G* For I saw this on this list yesterday morning... but was running late... so thought I'd respond as soon as I got to the office and subdued the werk monster. *S* The zzzzzzzzzzz's I found from PIP were not appreciated! LOL I've read the post in critical analysis... several times... enjoyed it more and learned a bit each time... and still... I sit here wondering how do you do this? *G* while waves break with tones of the eternal symphony, that the song has never been for you yet it yearns more personal and somehow less significant than the scrape dry turning turning of an empty tumbleweed down the drywashes of time This just aches... I think perhaps it hurts more to watch the steady decline of good that once was than to have it snatched away... for the fading makes you question if it ever was... for if it was, how could it no longer be. (Sorry... I know that's convoluted... but I haven't had coffee *G*) The beauty of your words and their poignancy never fail to touch... the creative process fascinates... Unfortunately, inhaling your words hasn't taught me how to write so well... but there's pleasure in the perusing. *G* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
like this Ed... the form intentionally ( I assume) made me slow down in my read and to look for the pattern of "chaos" that in some ways fading is... it appears orderly but is in fact an illusion of chaotic order..lol.. my own term.... was struck by the use of waves in a piece that otherwise seemed to be quite solid in images and rather more of the land based variety.. at first it set me back..but could in re-reading a few times bring the images together as coastal with the divergent climates and landscape... all in all.. very much enjoyed and think it well done. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...One of your best! Thank you for reposting to go with discussion in CA.  |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This hurt all the way through, but I love the style the flow, and the emotion that I felt in your wrods.I could fell it as if I was within your words.Not many touch me like that.  Crystal |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
these cleverly detached words only added to the feelings as i read, as i'm sure you know. Ed, this is one to read over and over, but perhaps not too many times, as i may give up on everything.  ~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~ Neil Young [This message has been edited by gemjop (10-18-2003 07:37 PM).] |
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