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Mona At The Library
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Mona At The Library |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Mona At The Library It still crackles in your wavelength where you passed the tables, but the dusts that leapt in static haste are looking for their spots to angle down. A pencil stub sped under a desk as you passed. It turned to watch, terror sharp in its linear eye. You leave behind a something like the sound of the big black magnet in the physics building. |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
confusing but good. i like. Meg Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ed... now this..I like... you mix the real images in with those that are a less solid and require the other senses, without having to truly do a description of the whole.. lol... I'm not making any sense.. try again ron... ok.. the real images in this are complimented by the ones you set up for the reader to imagine without describing them in detail.. and all are used to great effect in this piece to create the mood and deliver the overall image/feeling..... good stuff... very good stuff |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed....I agree with the cpat Ron...like this library lady, I do! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RascalLeader~ I SO enjoyed the way you did this one~ Loved using my imagination to color the character you sketched~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
holy...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
but the dusts that leapt in static haste are looking for their spots to angle down. I could sit here applauding... hoping you'd hear... for my fingers might find better expression in clapping hands than tapping keys. *S* Such vivid images... they will linger on my mind... even longer than dust motes linger in the air. *S* Did I mention that I love it? *S* |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Ed...I LIKE Mona At The Library...and especially like the danged pencil turning to look.....some kind of peeping Tom #2, I would think! Larry |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 dang, I always moan at the library!  enjoyed this write into my library to read again later |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was excellent.I could let my imagination paint the sketches of your words.  Crystal |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Whao, the imagery, everything... sheesh magnificent Ed! Maree  fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (10-10-2003 01:52 AM).] |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
uff.. awesome |
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