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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-08-15 08:11 AM

Deep Within

Deep
within the soul
the silent longing is there,
painfully,
woefully stubborn,
making it
hard to breathe
even to take
a deep breath.

A sensation of “reaching”
there,
down deep, holding on
to the mind’s
most fleeting thought,
discarding even love,
for a brief answer
to sweet agony.

How best to resolve
this indisputable emotion,
that which centers
itself
into a pit of desire,
not for love,
itself,
but for a brief sharing,
bidding
one's self well.

I know the answer,
for it has always been
within me,
but there are times
where I fail
to impart a sense
of urgency,
and the failure
pains me.

It is somewhat like
that faint, lonesome strain
of one violin,

sweet, pure, fine,
a lingering note,

reaching out for
one other to hear,
to understand,

knowing its
beauty in its
loneliness.

To share so much
so that another
is touched
by the rare beauty
of tender words,
this lingering feeling

still

doesn’t

let

me

breathe.

~*~

©KRJ
9 October, 1999
revised
7 May 2002
revised, yet again
15 August 2003

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

1 posted 2003-08-15 08:54 AM

Oh Karilea...you touch so many here with your tender words. So breathe, my dear friend, breathe effortlessly and deeply in the knowing you have touched the hearts of many with your wisdoms of verse.

Patricia

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

2 posted 2003-08-15 09:04 AM

Dear Karilea, this was beautiful, very much enjoyed, thank you for sharing.

Sincerely
Rick

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2003-08-15 09:15 AM

quote:
It is somewhat like
that faint, lonesome strain
of one violin

How very deep and beautiful! I understand. Let's breathe together, breathing in love.
Love, Margherita

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2003-08-15 09:52 AM

nice

dreambuilder
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since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

5 posted 2003-08-16 12:16 PM

Karilea
amazing
I absolutetly loved this
I started to cut & paste parts of this &
found I was copying the whole thing

looking for more than love
passionately searching for understanding
sharing of souls

awesome write & a new favorite - smile
DQ

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2003-08-16 12:27 PM

Said so very elegantly by a masterful poetess with a delicate touch.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2003-08-16 05:32 PM

Listening for that violin...or even a cello...James

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2003-08-16 05:37 PM

It is somewhat like
that faint, lonesome strain
of one violin,

This is a beautiful and elegant write, so tender and touching.

Breathing with you Sunshinygirl.

Maree.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-08-16 08:21 PM

I cannot tell you how many times that I have stopped breathing while reading your poetry! The eloquence with which you write, takes my breath away.

EA

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

10 posted 2003-08-16 08:31 PM

"It is somewhat like
that faint, lonesome strain
of one violin,

sweet, pure, fine,
a lingering note"

Just..Amazing.

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

11 posted 2003-08-16 08:36 PM

absolutely terrific,,,,

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

12 posted 2003-08-16 08:49 PM

I remember this and loved it then and love it now.

I know the answer,
for it has always been
within me,
but there are times
where I fail
to impart a sense
of urgency,
and the failure
pains me.

Oh, dear lady, how well I can relate!

Hugs, Marti

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

13 posted 2003-08-17 11:13 PM

Well, please let me tell you, dear Lady, that this definitely took my breath away ... know wonder it is a favorite.

Lovely read here.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

14 posted 2003-08-18 08:01 AM

..Sunshine../\..a very refreshing poem;

calming, in its wisdom; very nice../\..Spiros
-----------poetry------

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

15 posted 2003-08-18 10:49 AM

Kar,

This was beyond words...you are amazing.

Susan

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

16 posted 2003-08-18 10:54 AM

Karilea, I find myself doong the same thing that Linda said....
holding my breath while reading your poetry. Every
poem of yours I've read is absolutley beautiful.
Thank you, Sweet Sunshiney One.

Hugs

Ethel

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

17 posted 2003-08-18 09:22 PM

Karilea . . .
it should catch your breath that way . . .
This is the most beautiful display
of your soul I have seen . . .
My God . . . this is like fine crystal
Handle with care . . .

*btw, I just tossed my pen in the trash*
Beyond this world, truly
xxoo

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

18 posted 2003-08-18 09:29 PM

Karilea, my sis, my friend...how did I miss this? Touched me with it now...you did!!

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