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In the Silence |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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In the Silence Sometimes I wince the silent thrash Those stinging whips, in mental lash Knotted sin in brads of whim It tears me open skin to limb. Then dips me into the abyss And pulls me up by cannabis To drag me over dragon fire With tar and feathers as attire Sackcloth of a hellish hone That cuts the flesh to bone Then rubs me in salty brine And seasons me with blood and wine. It is a nightmare fantasy One beyond pure agony It is a scourge I cannot purge A constant surge that beats a dirge Harassment with a wicked shake Outrage to the point of wake |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like a rude awakening....... friday morning , friday morning..... always so nice to see you  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The terror of nightdreams comes through so vividly in this piece, Sy...I wish you better dreams when you close your eyes...  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I know about this. It happens between 2 and 3 a.m., the mental lash. I usually get back to sleep just before the alarm rings. grrrr You have described it well. You might need a nap today! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sometimes I wince the silent thrash Those stinging whips, in mental lash Knotted sin in brads of whim It tears me open skin to limb. Then dips me into the abyss And pulls me up by cannabis To drag me over dragon fire With tar and feathers as attire Sackcloth of a hellish hone That cuts the flesh to bone Then rubs me in salty brine And seasons me with blood and wine. ======================== Im just sitting here shaking me mothy head and smiling at you.... even when your pen bleeds with wrath and angst your clever wit and gift of verbiage and rhyme rise above all the hell fires. There are so many COOOL lines in this... so many classic Sy analogies and personifications...wrapped in your command of vocabulary and cadence...then all tied up with a poetic bow of brilliance in those closing couplets of WAAAAAY COOL !!!  Knotted sin in brads of whim It tears me open skin to limb. Then dips me into the abyss And pulls me up by cannabis Even when Randy is being reaaaaaaally randy...it leaves your pen daringly dandy. *L*  ( oh by the way...did I tell you Randy is going to Chicago with us?) right after he waves you and Isabel off on your cruise LOL *winkiewinkie*   "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." LH [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-08-2003 09:52 AM).] |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My, my dear Seymour, sounds to me like you need a nice cup of tea with honey and maybe....umm...yes, a nice butter tart. Then, a peaceful, dream free nap! I wonder what it was? The moon? I was tossing and turning all last night as well. Hmmm...where are those butter tarts? hugs, Chris |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 We will take you a pic from Lakeshore and the Sears Tower "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What I get is a silence filled with frightening visions. An impressive piece! Have a peaceful walk in the fresh air to neutralize these "invasions" of your nightly rest. Hugs. Margherita |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
...when silence is deafening... A wonderfully stygian write, Sy. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
give me words any day...in silence...i don't know what is wrong...h |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy Powerful, and colored dark...so well done!  |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
Seymour, sometimes silence can be the loudest sound heard. Thank You for sharing. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Sackcloth of a hellish hone That cuts the flesh to bone Then rubs me in salty brine And seasons me with blood and wine." Sy, This entire writing was sooooooo good!! I loved it! Above is my favorite lines.. Susan C. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inkedgoddess It's only words dear. Hugs Sunshine Thank you sweet. Kahlil Leaving on a trip tomorrow morning. I'll seep on the plane. JM, You are the sweet of my stability That and raspberry tea. WWRS Chris, You are a love. Hugs. Margherita Thank you my dear and hugs to you too. MARK, Thank you for the wonderful. vandana, Thank you dear. 1slick_lady In that you are right. Martie, Thank you for the well done sweet. Hugs [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (08-08-2003 12:04 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan, You are a doll, thank you so much. Amature2, Thank you for the nice reply. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Silence can sometimes be too much.Nicely done here. angelblueyes |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
angelblueyes I thank you with a hug and a |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
An excellent write, my friend... and especially poignant to me because just yesterday, I was enjoying silence and the thoughts it brought me... a long step from the silence that shrieks like this and visited me so many nights. *S* |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is a powerful poem - paints the nightmare in such stark light! And I thought MY nightmares were disturbing!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Wonderful reply, thank you. Rosemary, So nice to see you back again. Thank you for the read and comment. |
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