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It's So Average
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It's So Average |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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It's so average You dropped the slice of different taste when it slipped through cigarette stained fingers You're so average You have spent too many hours high trying to blame me for your vices inconsistencies I always made you feel love Whats so different in your talent when you can't think without the use of something Artifical What happened to 'real love' listening to the words You can't nurture it, fool If you're only half awake I'll only say I'm ok, when I am Sobering thoughts I should send you some for yesterday Or today, whichever But mine would differ from yours. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Gem..beatifully writen. I am sorry that he was blind to how much you cared  insanity is not a crime |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"You have spent too many hours high trying to blame me for your vices inconsistencies" That...up there..that you wrote...my life for 19 yrs...don't make the same mistake.. Excellent writing.. Susan C. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sobering thoughts I should send you some for yesterday Or today, whichever But mine would differ from yours. Gemma, it's very hard to have "sobering thoughts" when someone is in a daze...for whatever reason. Hugs, my dear friend,   Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"You have spent too many hours high trying to blame me for your vices inconsistencies" YES. I see my husband in that--but? I always have to turn the telescope back at myself, and yes, I see ME. *wince* I HATE those magnifying mirrors...sigh. And this? "Whats so different in your talent when you can't think without the use of something Artifical" While kicking the methadone, I raged that I couldn't write anymore. But then the fog lifted, and I went back and read some of my stoned scribblings, and thought, "Well, you certainly can't write any WORSE." sigh. Passing off vague hallucinations as "visionary thought"--  grin? So now I just keep my head down and keep typing--looking for that balance. Thank you, gemma, with hugs. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Too many people bring about an "average" to a greater scale... it's so hard to climb above the masses so we hide our inconsistencies... Very good write, Gemma... but when those who have decide not to, and start again? There are some, like the little gal just above me, who fly very high on their very own... |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
quote: do they not understand that? i don't know awesome poem here gem riley * the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes * |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You do realize, don't you?--that you only deserve the best! Never just settle! Love shouldn't hurt!  LL |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I can relate to this...."Marijuana won't hurt ya...won't hurt ya...won't hurt ya....good write gal. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I always made you feel love Whats so different in your talent when you can't think without the use of something Artifical What happened to 'real love' listening to the words You can't nurture it, fool If you're only half awake Gem, your writing is astounding me Every time I read you, it is something I have felt, thought or wanted to write and all I have to do is click you on . . . and there it is . . . thank you xxoo |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
gem...i have read this about 100 times...every time, i see something different...most profound...i even printed it to read over whenever i want, for it moves me deeply...i love how you stand tall and firm even in pain...poet sweet poet sing on...helen |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very nice, very good.. I am enjoying reading your poetry quite a lot... regards sudhir |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
there's no need to watch the bridges as they burn -- al green but, nice reading you! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sobering thoughts indeed~ Good writing, gemma, gemma  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
wiping tequila from my chin..... wha?huh? sigh yes this is a very pointed write Gem and one that Is needed smile cool |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I hear ya, loud and clear |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"What happened to 'real love' listening to the words You can't nurture it, fool If you're only half awake I'll only say I'm ok, when I am Sobering thoughts I should send you some for yesterday Or today, whichever But mine would differ from yours." Wow, Gem... you've blown me away. All of a sudden I'm light as a feather. I understand this, more so, I GET this. |
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