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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-09-17 07:49 PM



And, And, And…

I know the tender aching
of broken skin
from a heart held
tightly within
and the uncomfortable
fit of regret
the two of us
have already met
and the way darkness
holds the night
a total surround
pulling you tight
and heard the sting
of needing more
too much ocean
within those shores
and I am the drops
of a velvet storm
confused in time
between night and mourn
and I still wait in
the space between the rain
and here I remain
and I remain
and
I remain


"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

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Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-09-17 08:17 PM


*sigh

beautifully written

Aenimal
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2 posted 2003-09-17 08:39 PM


oh those ands...
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2003-09-17 09:21 PM


OneSlick~
Lady ... this is GORGEOUS !!!!!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Local Rebel
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4 posted 2003-09-17 09:49 PM


drops of a velvet storm
or tears an angel shed


icebox
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5 posted 2003-09-17 10:27 PM


Very well done!
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-09-17 10:33 PM


Truly wonderful!  

You make it so difficult to find a favorite line..

Susan

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7 posted 2003-09-17 11:04 PM


AND ...I like it,

AND ... I love it,

AND ... I want some more of it!

       Velvet drops indeed, that ocean is very deep!

alisa
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8 posted 2003-09-18 09:50 PM


wow, all i can say is wow....
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9 posted 2003-09-19 09:18 AM


And... this is incredible. *S*
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10 posted 2003-09-19 09:40 AM


Beautiful, in form and in substance....a velvet storm indeed.

Nice picture, that -- sort-of carried me away....

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11 posted 2003-09-19 01:46 PM


I think I've bumped into you there...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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12 posted 2003-09-19 02:10 PM


And, I do believe I'll keep this one, it is a beautiful drop of life's poetry.
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13 posted 2003-09-19 04:21 PM


terrifically penned,,,

                                   

ctowen
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14 posted 2003-09-19 09:01 PM


B U M P !

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15 posted 2003-09-19 11:44 PM


in the space between the rain . . .
(we wait . . . we wait in vain)

I like that line a lot
(and probably should have left it alone)

e

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16 posted 2003-09-19 11:47 PM



Oh my...this is beautiful, Helen...truly beautiful.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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17 posted 2003-09-20 12:13 PM


Sometimes those ands in space seem to go on forever.  Nicely written.
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