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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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scratching tired thoughts that float in the dull evening air like the sun itself relentlessly shredding soul to spread light to the lightless and give hope to the hopeless they have had enough and now their stint is done in this vast prison where time is a jailer and memories -- the prime criminals they rest like stench on dry barks of dead trees that once were green fresh like mist-filled dawns soon they won’t even be worth their scratches yet the sun would dawn till the star dies [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (08-06-2003 08:40 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
There is nothing irritable in these words. Wonderful Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
scratching tired thoughts that float in the dull evening air like the sun itself relentlessly shredding soul to spread light to the lightless and give hope to the hopeless ============================== soon they won’t even be worth their scratches yet the sun would dawn till the star dies ========================== well this is just cooler than cool...I am loving the assonance and alliterations.. and the imagery is very cool..ethereal and haunting...and that closing couplet... stunning...NO... BRILLIANT  excellent write poet Sud  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
enjoyed this a lot |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
...makes me want to reach for some emotion-lotion and smooth away the discomfort... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all dear friends... so very much... regards, Sudhir |
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