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TWENTY OR LESS...#135
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
TWENTY OR LESS…#135 Copyright 2003 by: Mark V Sheldon distant flash brilliant electric noise the room is soundless hands on the controls laboring breath cradling chaos against the enemy You CAN make a difference: |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You are certainly mastering this form. Excellent! Eric |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
well done... I really like your twenty or less poetry a lot... concise and effective... regards sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
First read, first impression: Fighter pilot Second read, second impression: The President at the helm during the advent of nuclear war. Excellent write, Mark! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-06-2003 11:02 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MARK, An exceptional write, enjoyed. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sounds to me like your fighting the war of the worlds within...all mankind???? Great write...I liked. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
indeed indeed Mark beautifully penned this made me think of a video game (shows where my mind is) This is tough to do xxoo |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
interesting...love it! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Eric -- I keep carving in hopes of reaching the core... Sudhir, I'm pleased to hear you're enjoying them. Part of the fun is never knowing what the next one is going to be... Thanks for the feedback. Hey Sunshine -- those are very possible imagries... I was picturing something towards THE THING... Seymour: ...exceptional...? Wow. Coming from you that's quite a feel-good & I'm glad you enjoyed -- thank you, Sir. LeeJ: Getting close... All mankind? In one way or another, I'm sure of it... Thanks for the read & thoughts. littlewing: A video game could definitely be another possibility -- and an acurate one. As for being tough to do...? Not at all -- just pick any 20 (or less) words of your choice and carve something interesting -- that's all. They're a very fun snapshot of a moment within one's stream of consciousness... KristieSue: Thanks for your interest and enthusiasim. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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