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Now it's here |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Now it’s here… Private turning points are silently held here, inside, and now, mine are churning… this “time” should go into a journal telling the selves of me “shhh, hush now, no one should know you feared anything…” but then, how human is that? The quiet fear of me I shall not tell, nor reveal, these revelations being too much for any one to consider, as, why should one have to? Yet…yet… here lies a fear, which now, having been trammeled by insouciance, possibly quelling a life once so bright! You know, a life once so forgiving of all others… now wondering what he/she/I did wrong… “You did just fine,” were words said while [I] standing in private cower, behind veils of gray shadowing in, I had once known this fear, in the before of today, and I knew its grip well… and in its grip again, all I could think was, “please, let go” but the day highlighted, then lowered into an abyss…of what I had been, or could be, once had been, then was… nightmares are like this, upending one into a maelstrom of contentions. I walked through this time of what I had not wrought upon myself unless, was this a fear of me and who I only thought I was, that had come to call? Pranks are one thing; Reality another. I know what is real; I want what is good. I am an eternal optimist. Shenanigans should be solidly sold on Halloween… but this is not 1953 anymore. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-30-2003 07:43 AM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
beautiful literary genre and a pleasure to read,,, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine A wonderful write.  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
K- This poem reminds me of the Cold War and possible nuclear attacks, when children were shown reel-to-reel films on safety (huh, safety?) if the communists decided it was time to end the capitalist machine. When I was in elementary school, they did not show such films; however, the threat was always in the back of my mind. I remember as a child lying awake at night, thinking about what ifs. I have discussed this with my friends today, and many felt the same way. This reminds me of a personal nuclear attack. Does that make sense? You have definitely left a mark on me with this, Karilea. I dare say, I will have a few lying awake moments in the what if realm. Patricia |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is so well written and beautifuly flowing. Excellent! Eric |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea....You know I understand.  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
And, you know that I know too, Karilea...  Ethel |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Gosh Sunshine...this was beautiful! Definitely one for the library shelf. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Methinks there is very much flowing under the surface of the already roiled waters of this fine poem. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Pranks are one thing; Reality another. I know what is real; I want what is good. I am an eternal optimist. I may not sound like it in my poetry..but I am an eternal optimist also...Just trying to see the best in everything despite its outcome on me...I liked this very much Kairlea hugs M |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
optimists pessimists realists all drink the same cup and must turn at the point when the road bends not breaking or retreat  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karilea...I hear you...and I understand. "My friends are my estate." |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Sunshine.:-) Sounds as if some historical baggage is still being carried? "silently held here, inside, and now, mine are churning…" Loved the form and how it delivered the messege... Thanks for sharing. >>>>ice<<<< |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
m'friend.. I hear you.Maree. fate is not just |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kari, I can't say I understand what this is about but I do hear you loud and clear. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sunshine...I really enjoyed this poem. You have touched on many fears and insecurities that we all go through.You have fought the battles and won. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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