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Midnight Fantasies
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Midnight Fantasies |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada 
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Midnight fantasies of me and you Making love the whole night through Giving my love that is true Then getting up and feeling blue 'Cause I know I don't have you Midnight fantasies of making love all night Taking our spirits to a new height Holding you close, and squeezing you tight How you fill me with delight Midnight fantasies of you and me Reaching new heights of ecstasy Dreaming of bliss that may never be So give it to me, boy, in my fantasy Midnight fantasies that make me weak Pleasure so sweet it makes me overheat Passion so strong it makes me reach my peak I get so excited I just can't speak Midnight fantasies of you Tell me quick, what can I do To make all my fantasies come true |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
i hate to say this, but the rhyme scheme gets a bit repetive and predictable . . . I usually think that schemes such as abab work better than aaaa. Good job though. I hope you get your wishes! |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
I understand what you mean but sometimes your heart is so full of love you can only decribe it one way  i try to mix it up and havent done the rhyme thing in awile, but to each it's own!thanks Tequilia |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...I would say believe...and hold out for what you want...patience...be mysterious...James |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
thankx everyone for your lovely comments  |
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