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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-08-21 05:56 PM

i watched you die today
while being pampered
by the girl with almond eyes,

i saw you gasp for breath
with reddened toes, i sat,
watching helplessly a life go by,

i administered your last rites
in silence,
as your very own went on their day,

and i wondered
if they even knew
and just turned themselves
the other way,

i never heard your muffled cries
and i wondered why it seemed
that one outside your glasshouse world
would care more than your own,

i saw you die today and wished you love,

in a 30 minute pedicure,
this fragile life
smacking me, swimming with the fish
beside my eyes

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-22-2003 08:26 PM).]

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

1 posted 2003-08-21 06:05 PM

Sounds of life running away ....

          though it comes with the teritory,
          it should not have to be that way.

          Good for you to have cared enough to notice.

[This message has been edited by ctowen (08-21-2003 06:07 PM).]

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-08-21 06:15 PM

Good God Michele . . .
Bless your heart
I am sorry
xxoo

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

3 posted 2003-08-21 09:13 PM

sad,,,,,,

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

4 posted 2003-08-21 09:17 PM

Such sadness, but you took the time to notice.
Crystal

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-08-21 09:23 PM

"swimming with the fish"

smile.

I love that.

A bit of onimous foreshadow, and if I may, I add this one to the people watching collection?

Melancholy but not without grit.

I enjoyed.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2003-08-21 09:47 PM

thanks for looking in and feeling this too.

take it away serene one, its all yours....thanks

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-08-22 04:53 AM

looking in, feeling...and drifting off into that mood I can never explain

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

8 posted 2003-08-22 07:56 AM

Your words made me think of...

It is funny how in life sometimes at the least or unexpected moment we may conjure a memory, whether happy or sad, or we learn of a tragedy that we didn't expect.

Enjoyed!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2003-08-22 08:01 AM

A very deeply felt write, leaving me with much to think on. Very well written and very much enjoyed. *btw* Love your critique!

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

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