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suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

0 posted 2003-08-20 04:43 PM

A glow of gold shimmers over the water
As the sun says farewell for the night
Seagulls dip and sway on breath of breeze
Ballet performance in the soft fade of light
Sand slips from shore, obeying waves beckon
Delicate shell comes to rest at my feet
Moonrise peeks shyly along the horizon
A falling star’s a celestial treat.
Here in the vast stillness of ocean and sky
You feel so close, I reach for your hand
My eyes drift shut, your face is before me
Fingers feel squeeze, I know you understand.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-08-20 04:49 PM

Now, that's a touching reach, Suthern...
understood...and felt.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2003-08-20 04:52 PM

suthern

The sea is often a place where hearts can meet, although distance is far, somehow the ocean and the sky bring nearness to two seperate pairs of feet.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-08-20 04:55 PM

This gave me goosebumps suthern...the good kind.
Love this...it's a keeper.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-08-20 04:56 PM

~ ~ * ~ ~
* * ~* > Romantically Terrific < *~ * *
~ ~ * ~ ~

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2003-08-20 05:27 PM

suthern - on the beach, the best kind of romance when the sun is going down...

BC

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2003-08-20 06:22 PM

SweetSuthernGal~
Oh my Oh my ... how I love the soft imagery in this beauty~

Exquisite ... really exquisite !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

7 posted 2003-08-20 06:25 PM

*sigh*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2003-08-20 06:47 PM

I understand...

EA

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2003-08-20 07:17 PM

enjoyed

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2003-08-20 08:27 PM

A glow of gold shimmers over the water
As the sun says farewell for the night
Seagulls dip and sway on breath of breeze
Ballet performance in the soft fade of light
Sand slips from shore, obeying waves beckon
Delicate shell comes to rest at my feet
Moonrise peeks shyly along the horizon
A falling star’s a celestial treat.
===========================

Alliterations...assonance...cadence...and
exquisite imagery that allows me to breathe...
YEP... the moth is taking this one...
(you wrote it for me, right?)

It mine mine mine...and I aint sharing it LOL

thank you for taking the moth to the beach...
I sure needed this lovely respite of waved reverie.

Beautiful write of surf and soul poetess Ruth

Its been a million years since I touched you
I was hoping time would help me win this game,
but being away from you is slowly driving me insane.

JilGirl
Member

since 2003-05-24

Posts 364
Washington

11 posted 2003-08-21 01:32 AM

Excellent write!
Much enjoyed!

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

12 posted 2003-08-21 01:41 AM

Dang, I don't have a beach handy.

(Ya know, I think it's all in the wave action . . .)

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

13 posted 2003-08-21 01:51 AM

Laura this is good, one of your best yet, your imagery so strong...been gropig for a word, and I think it would be "compelling"... Yes, compelling imagery, just pulls the reader in and won't let 'em go until the last dot.

Definitely a keeper....checking library box NOW.....

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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2003-08-21 09:49 AM

Sunshine: I'm so glad you liked... thank you very much! *S*

Martie: Thank you, kind lady! *S*

With love, two hearts can always meet
However distant the pairs of feet. *S*

Enchantress: I don't think I've ever inspired goosebumps before... but I like it! LOL Thank you so much! *S*

QjQ: Thank you! *S*

Bill: Even when physically alone. *S* Thank you!

Marge: You dear. *S* I'm so glad you liked... thank you! *S*

Ceinwyn: Thank you for that sigh! *S*

EA: I know. *S* And I thank you very much! *S*

vandana: Thank you!

JM: Well... to be totally honest... *squirming a bit*.. I DID have someone else in mind... those weren't YOUR fingers I was reaching for! LOL But I'd be glad to share my shore... thank you! *S*

JilGirl: Thank you very much! *S*

S Arthur Grey: ROFL... Yup! *G* Thank you!

Ratleader: You honor me, my friend... and your kind words are greatly appreciated. *S* Thank you very much! *S*

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

15 posted 2003-09-03 03:06 PM

just beautiful lady...shores do not seperate feelings as this

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

16 posted 2003-09-03 03:13 PM

can you tell I like this one?

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

17 posted 2003-09-03 05:11 PM

Oh My! This touched me ...yes it did.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

18 posted 2003-09-03 07:25 PM

Here in the vast stillness of ocean and sky
You feel so close, I reach for your hand
My eyes drift shut, your face is before me
Fingers feel squeeze, I know you understand.

Yes, Suthern!!! I feel this one.

Hugs

Ethel

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

19 posted 2003-09-03 07:27 PM

This is so beautiful, soft, and sweet.A sweet memory that touches each one

Crystal

Lady Godiva
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 35
at the bottom of your glass

20 posted 2003-09-03 08:54 PM

this sings to me...gorgeous..just touching..

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

21 posted 2003-09-03 09:11 PM

Silky...so descriptive....James

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

22 posted 2003-09-04 10:36 AM

jellybeans: THank you, my friend... and yes... some things transcend distance. *S*

Midnitesun: I'm delighted you do... thank you! *S*

Kethry: Then it touched a gentle heart... and that fills me with gladness. *S* Thank you so much!

garysgirl: I thought you would... glad you did! *S* Thank you! *S*

angelblueyes: Thank you so much... your kind words are truly appreciated. *S*

Lady Godiva: I'm so glad... thank you for liking... and welcome to Passions! *S*

JamesMichael: Silky... I like that! *S* Thank you very much!

DarlingDeb
New Member

since 2003-08-28

Posts 9
Harriman, Tn

23 posted 2003-09-04 10:03 PM

Very true, been there, done that! What a lovely feeling it is to live in paradise!

Deb

Everyone has a "Special Angel" watching over them each day!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

24 posted 2003-09-05 11:21 AM

Deb: Thank you so much... and welcome to Passions! *S*

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