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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2003-08-18 04:19 PM

Balloons rise up into the sky,
then whoosh, they're gone without a pop.
So much like life: you laugh, you cry.
Balloons rise up into the sky-
bright orbs reflecting heaven's sigh-
then dip and dive and belly-flop.
Balloons rise up into the sky-
Then Whoosh! They're gone! Without a pop.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-08-18 04:36 PM

SweetNan~
It's SO good to see you~
This is expertly done ... the imagery is enchanting~
Sending BIG *HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2003-08-18 04:38 PM

Gone ... without a pop!
Yes, this gives the idea!
Love, Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2003-08-18 04:44 PM

Howdy, Pilgrim! We kept the home fires burnin' for ya!

Wonderful triolet! It had me dipping and diving, falling and flying all over the place--and then whoosh, I was gone!

EA

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2003-08-18 05:47 PM

Marge, I have a little free time and thought I'd run over to see how everyone is. It's good to be around a bit.

Margherita, Thanks so much!

EA

I mostly do the belly-flop part of it!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

5 posted 2003-08-19 12:27 PM

Nicely done, oh fervid Pilgrim...count on you for maximum depth, and count on you to foreground it with the brightest imagery.....

...psst....don't be disappearing without a pop...not for a long, long time....

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______________Ratleader______________

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-08-19 01:52 AM

Nan - what a beautiful triolet!
God, you have the punch . . .
the resounding lines . . .
I adore this
nice job
made me smile
xxoo

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2003-08-19 10:07 AM

Ratleader-that's one of the nicest compliments I ever received. Thank you.

littlewing-I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Triolets can be fun to write. Heck, I have fun writing all the forms. (except villanelles, they give me headaches)

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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