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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Please don't take me to your garden and show me how deep you had to dig to bury the bulbs especially the tulips that bloom profusely completing my missing. I am well aware there are no guarantees and only so many petals that will curve in the curvature and open up to the sky. Like a warming trend basking in the sunlight and the slice of heaven that took me there caring enough to stand alone complacent in a vase filling my life with color arranged in disarray. ~*~ |
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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA |
Blues... This reminded me of a still life of a full and rich vase of spring flowers, but not arranged--just sort of taken out of the garden and put inside, because they are beautiful. I especially liked this image: Like a warming trend... It indicates a change in emotions, or an acceptance of the situation--that's nice. Thank you for this, --Matt |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely penned,, enjoyied the read,,, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A riotous display in disarray can be a very beautiful sight to see!   EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy . . . enough to stand alone this, you do m'dear beautifully . . . here I love your new picture! tweets xxoo |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
disarray could be more poetic than fitting into neat little vases i know this well |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
one reason why I love your poetry so much is because you only write one..like once a week. So I am allways waiting for you. and ya never fail to please  insanity is not a crime |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
arranged in disarray.... you write damn good girl. and, i like your new pic pretty lady! you look so huggable! Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade arranged in disarray. Is a poem in itself. Good one.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow -- into the library with this one! When I'm reading a poem, my one constant demand is "Don't tell me, show me..." You do that here in a beautiful way, fresh images blended with an original viewpoint on the emotion of it....good work, first word to last. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"filling my life with color arranged in disarray" Any idea how much I love those lines??? Thought so... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lori..I'm with Duncan on my favourite choice of words.. Wonderful write and much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori You want a job in our flower shop? Loved this! |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
arranged in disarray I like this line...sounds like my life. You been peeking....nice write! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This is truly one of your best Lori, the metaphors and descriptive writing are absolutely excellent. Love the tulips line the best. |
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