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Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

0 posted 2003-07-22 08:47 AM

Midnight Indecisions

Midnight indecisions
ravage sea blue satin
where we once lay

Now just a mind’s
shallow display, a

Soiled vision of
two mute shadows
standing arm’s
length in muddy shoals,

Never to be submerged
in gentle cleanse of
baptismal stream

Forgiveness remains
unfound, beneath a
slow trickle of
marbled fountain
where we danced
as one celestial body
among reflection
of night sky

At passion’s hour

I close my eyes
in one last
embrace of what
could have been and

With your release,

indecision fades

blissful into mists
of midnight

Alone,
I decidedly bid
myself good night

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-07-22 08:51 AM

Forgiveness remains
unfound, beneath a
slow trickle of
marbled fountain
where we danced
as one celestial body
among reflection
of night sky

I stretched for forgiveness once...
and almost didn't find
my way home.

Well done, Patricia...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2003-07-22 08:55 AM

Patricia~
I smile with this read ... that's the way to work that muse ... keep her up past the mid-of-night-hour !!!

Love the tender poignancy of the message lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2003-07-22 09:12 AM

At passion’s hour

I close my eyes
in one last
embrace of what
could have been and

With your release,

indecision fades

blissful into mists
of midnight

Alone,
I decidedly bid
myself good night

Oh, just, yes. Into my library.

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2003-07-22 09:16 AM

This is soooo beautiful.
Eric

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

5 posted 2003-07-22 02:47 PM

great write!....very vivid emotional journey

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2003-07-22 02:55 PM

Oh, my! Didn't you just go and pen yourself another beauty! Felt this one to the end!

~ and I bid you a "Good night" for each and every nighttime you have remaining on this earthly realm...

Loving hugs,
EA

PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

7 posted 2003-07-22 03:01 PM

There's so many good lines in here, I don't know where to begin...wow

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2003-07-22 08:34 PM

Midnight indecisions
ravage sea blue satin
where we once lay

Now just a mind’s
shallow display, a

Soiled vision of
two mute shadows
standing arm’s
length in muddy shoals,

Never to be submerged
in gentle cleanse of
baptismal stream

======================

Love the imagery and vocab in this poetess Patricia...is has a slightly haunted, surreal feel to it...and the title is so perfect.
Congrats on your 1000th post...youre a wonderful addition to our poetic family.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2003-07-23 02:42 PM

Silky...James

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

10 posted 2003-07-23 03:55 PM

This really touched something deep within me.. perhaps because I have had so many wee hours of wakefulness, struggling with indecision.. that and the fact that you wrote it so very well

Thank you for sharing

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

11 posted 2003-07-23 05:01 PM

Good night Patricia, I send you pleasant dreams...

BC

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

12 posted 2003-07-23 05:41 PM

Excellent write...
Especially liked "into mists of midnight"

Excellent. TD

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

13 posted 2003-07-23 07:45 PM

Patricia...what a tender and touching write this is.
Beautifully done, my friend...thank you for sharing it.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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