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Over the Edge |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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She is going on the long road to wherever the toxic air is thick with her regret layers of meaning passing through her notice chill on morning covers from last night’s draft Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper so far to go to find that midnight pool only a line that moves with desperation and the sound of quiet water far below Let it pass she tells inside of eager his lips are dew on sandy beach of time your waiting for the water like a river in a drought and release is on the other side of out Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling of something wild and winged in bright below the night she now releases to her pillow while taking the elevator to get home |
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Deus Junior Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 18California, US |
Impressive. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Feeling the longitude and latitude of discontent here...a silent anguish. Impressively written. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I am in awe of your writing skills poetess Martie. Extremely well done. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Let it pass she tells inside of eager his lips are dew on sandy beach of time your waiting for the water like a river in a drought and release is on the other side of out You write of the inner sorrow exquisitely. It's an honor to read you, and I thank you for all your treasured gifts and flawless poetry. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You are so remarkably word-lovely~ 'Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper so far to go to find that midnight pool only a line that moves with desperation and the sound of quiet water far below' Memorably beautiful, my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your writing either keeps one from breathing or taking a breath or just catching it in hold... yes, it is just like that... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - as always... BC |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper so far to go to find that midnight pool only a line that moves with desperation and the sound of quiet water far below Let it pass she tells inside of eager his lips are dew on sandy beach of time your waiting for the water like a river in a drought and release is on the other side of out" Martie...you are just SO COOL! The images that your words create in my brain are amazing...and so uniquely you. I absolutely LOVE this!  Love and hugs to you, friend...  "So here I am with pockets full of good intentions But none of them will comfort me tonight..." ~Carpenters [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-17-2003 09:26 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deus...Thank you for that one word. TD...Your replies are always appreciated for there thought. Nancy...I make the awe into a ball and throw it back at you. Lori...Your reply made me feel special...thank you. Marge/sis...:loveyou: Karilea...Breathing is one of the most important things we do. Bill...yep! Vicky...It's too hot to be cool, but I thank you for the kind you mean. Love and hugs back. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper so far to go to find that midnight pool only a line that moves with desperation and the sound of quiet water far below Let it pass she tells inside of eager his lips are dew on sandy beach of time your waiting for the water like a river in a drought and release is on the other side of out ===================================== And your poetry tis the oasis in the drought. Love the imagery and assonance of your word play Martie-girl. Very cool write indeed.  "I'm good at two things and this is the other one." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling of something wild and winged in bright below the night she now releases to her pillow while taking the elevator to get home Martie, you are absolutely awesome... and your writing is, too.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You always impress me with your write.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper When I grow up I wanna write just like you Martie!! This is incredible. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper a favorite line...but as always each line brings me back to many places I have been lovely, Martie M |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great poem...so many wonderful lines...all tied together gracefuly. Eric |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling _______- Great line...i keep reading this over and over...its definition is so tied in expereince...great stuff Mike |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - this is just terrific and I shall read it again and again as it tells me things I did not know - Paul |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So enigmatic, this one, so many dimensions in one poem that it's hard to hold them all. The way you show the flow of emotion, make us feel it with you, is just stunning.... "Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling of something wild and winged in bright below the night she now releases to her pillow while taking the elevator to get home" ....and this -- the levels of it...you weave magic carpets, Martie. And to think I almost missed this, by being gone at the wrong time! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Let it pass she tells inside of eager his lips are dew on sandy beach of time your waiting for the water like a river in a drought and release is on the other side of out Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling So many emotions course through me as I read this... including awe at your abilities to paint so vividly with words. *S* Excellent! |
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