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Rambling Nature. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665
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Twas on a sunny day in June, as i walked through the light dappled wood, i first heard it's tune. Sweetly lilting sound of the willow warbler, perching up on high, watching, i saw it sway on the twig of a tree in the sunlight, with a background of clear blue sky. Moving quietly to the edge of a pool, a swan and his mate glided over the water, and through the breeze so cool. Walking along a fields edge, rabbits dashed for cover into the hederows, above their heads magpies noisily cackled at jet black crows. Sitting on a log i ate my sandwhiches and smelled the scent of the blinding yellow oil-seed rape,wafting on the wind. Just then from a dense thicket i heared a hard echoing call, a male pheasant his mate he was looking to find. Along a country road the sun bounced off the ground, heat haze distorted the road ahead, then high above me, no more than a speck in the sky, a skylark sang the most inspiring, uplifting, acingly beautiful sound. On through a corn field i walked with my arms outstretched, feeling the coarse stalks of corn on my fingers and hands. I watched a wave blown by the wind ripple through the ripening corn, like a golden sea.Picking an ear of corn i rubbed it through my hands , rough to my touch the chaff blew away, like timeless sands. Later at home, i dreamed the day alive....! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can see why you would want to relive those moments again...and again. Enjoyed this! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
You take me there my love, I would enjoy sharing all of this with you, the way you describe it in beautiful detail brings the words to life from the the monitor....you are the best poet of nature! You have a great talent and gift for making the reader see, hear, feel, touch, taste, and smell, painting a perfect picture before their eyes! love this about you!  XXX love A Romantic Heart [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (07-17-2003 07:13 AM).] |
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SongVixen Junior Member
since 2003-07-06
Posts 43England |
you sure are a nature watcher. enjoyed much! |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
very nice, the last stanza has some troubling grammatical and spacing...but very vivid, one thing i might reccomend is to shorten up your description to the meat of it...there is so much beautifull writing, it almost feels too much at one time...great read Mike |
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