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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2003-07-15 11:23 AM

the realization that something is wrong
dives in for landing at odd times
like when you wake up too early
with a headache clinging
like last night's tears
and you think of breakfast
in terms of ice cream bars
and orange juice.
You're afraid to walk
with bare feet into the yard
lest something dark
tunnel into your soul
finding entrance on the bottom of your foot
pummeling your mood
before it has a chance to breath the sunshine.
When you begin to think
that you see the night's bad dreams
standing over your shoulder
waiting to lull you back to sleep
to further dine
on whatever morsel of sanity and peace of mind
you might have left.

See the shadows fall darker
hiding you
where no one will ever find you again?
its that small corner
where something waits
with a black crayon
waiting to scribble with glee
over whatever is left
of the color in your heart.

the realization that something is wrong
stumbles through the door
at odd times
like when you're sitting here
waiting for the next bad thing to happen.

Late at night you'll come crawling back
Just to steal a piece of me

"Default"

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2003-07-15 11:27 AM

Hey, I really, really liked this...

Great job...

And that something wrong use to stumble into my door all the time...

Susan C.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2003-07-15 11:30 AM

Just dropped in for a few quick reads and LO!
this was the very first piece in the forum...enjoyed it mucho my friend...very well written.

jwesley

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

3 posted 2003-07-15 03:15 PM

I like what you have done here. It would seem that “realization” is a bit drunk at times, and requires strange foods in the morning.

Very unique, just as you.

Thank you.

Peace is the only battle worth waging.
--- Albert Camus

[This message has been edited by Moonlight Romeo (07-15-2003 03:15 PM).]

JaiOfHeaven
Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 207
California, Usa

4 posted 2003-07-16 03:53 AM

eerie...made me think of a hole in my foot and spiritually being eaten away by someone " dun dun DUNNNN". Could've sworn I felt the crayon coloring on my heart...unique...eerie...

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