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Teardrops of Love --- A Shape Poem
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Teardrops of Love --- A Shape Poem |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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~ Teardrops of Love ~ As these hues of rain dance ever so softly from crystal eyes releasing in free-form Venus bliss in vibrant spill streams cascade like waterfalls moistened pearls drip glisten pools in diamond glints of dewdrop drench across emblazoned cheeks of sky skin through salty slide of a love’s harmony reflections of your gentleness live on how deep you have kissed my soul floating on heart’s watercolours pirouetting in shadows bathe teardrops flutter refreshing showering my spirit with only you By Melissa Long-Monette Okay, so it isn't Shakespeare, but, it's fun and it isn't as easy to do as it looks.... SO MAYBE THIS COULD BE A CHALLENGE? I'd love to see other 'shape' poems soon!  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Melissa, No they aren't easy. I've done them too. But that was cool AND a love poem. It's perfect. And here is one I was involved in: Shared Heart If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. [This message has been edited by Larry C (07-14-2003 12:29 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Melissa, I salute you! This was a well-written poem in content--and shape!  Here's one of mine as requested: /pip/Forum80/HTML/001984.html Warm hugs and an appreciative smile! Linda |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
A treasured tear of a friend is worth more than a diamond... Thank you for this poem! I enjoy reading "shape" poems. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Nice work melissa, but i don't think I'll be part of that challenge. hard enough trying to say something as it is let alone within the confines of a shape |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You are an artist of word and form, well done.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very lovely Melissa! Although I can't even put two words together lately to write a poem, let alone one in a shape..lol...this is fantastic! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Melissa - beautiful amazing and yes I cant imagine trying to write in a shape - awesome challenge though . . . |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
melissa how beautiful penned....presented in an amazing form. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Venus bliss in vibrant spill streams cascade like waterfalls moistened pearls drip glisten pools in diamond glints of dewdrop drench across emblazoned cheeks of sky skin ====================================== ahhhhhhh the moth is giddy... look at all those groooovy allits and imagery and the assonance is just as cool as is the format and display of your words. excellent creative work Melis-girlie. Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very cool, I will try it. Jason |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Melissa, I love this. I will try it when I get the time, because I know that it takes a lot of work to do this. This is simply beautiful.  Hugs  Ethel (Pssstttt!!! I posted a little rictameter for this. Even though it's diamond shaped, I know that's kinda like cheating, cause the counts already there.) [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-15-2003 11:42 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 gorgeous! just beautiful! |
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