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Whirl of Wind
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Whirl of Wind |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Whirl of Wind a 'stream of consciousness', she said just spill it... write of anything and everything yet think of nothing in between lest thoughts should clutter verse in flutter on the wing of butterfly and now he cries... those caterpillar tears unspoken fears of taking wing his time to sing as flowered masses gather 'round to hear the sound of flutter... in gentle mutter of the wind in sigh... and then I spy a leaf in fall on dizzy breeze drift through the trees aimlessly... nowhere to go nowhere to be spinning free on wispy air as ribbon fallen from the hair in gentle twirl of finger's curl in constant whirl of wind a dream unfurled no more a dream...reality a heart has found serenity and wayward leaf is come to rest upon the chest of Mother Earth who knows its worth and that of butterfly who flutters by on wing of gratitude... and smiles ~vlraynes Thank you, Karen...again.   "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-12-2003 09:19 PM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Ooh, this is lovely, great write!  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
This is just beautiful...images are exquisite. Patricia |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nicely written,,,, A voice of honesty |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very, very beautiful, Vicky. I like the way it just flowed down the page.  Hugs Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky....This is a leaf-butterfly of thought, could feel its drift and enjoyed the up-lift! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
just spill it... write of anything and everything yet think of nothing in between lest thoughts should clutter verse in flutter ~*~ Well heck...this shoots down the poem I was trying to create.... what the heck... I may put it up anyway! Your muse is looking good, sitting there by your side... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I missed you Vicky, and I loved your poem. It is library material If art is still inside, I feel it |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*shaking head* Vicky, I am going to pray that you will never have writers block again, just so that I can be selfish and read more.... Kielo I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
and here I sit, in smile, enjoying this stream |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh, this is beautiful....She'll love it! Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
THANK YOU KAREN!!!  (see Mum I told you I'd thank her)Mum, you know how much I like this but I'll say it again: WOW It's so awesome to see you writing again!! ... Even though you're gone ... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
i think you spilled it (hiding the brawny towels) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you NUT!!! this is fabulous, and hey? my method ain't rocket science, but sometimes it's FUN to just toss paint on the wall, yanno?  Love you lady! and YOU are an inspiration! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Ah yes...This is good stuff!! I like this whole bunches..This is a poet's soul at its best pouring out... some great lines in this one...among them: "spinning free on wispy air as ribbon fallen from the hair in gentle twirl of finger's curl in constant whirl of wind a dream unfurled" much enjoyed the flow.. lv, g "If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen [This message has been edited by dgvarner (07-13-2003 07:13 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ Nice~ Liked this thought - 'a dream unfurled no more a dream' *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kaoru...thank you. Patricia...so glad you enjoyed..thank you. QjQ...thanks so much. Ethel...your replies always make me smile...I appreciate you. Martie...really glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for being YOU. Karilea...LOL @ this shooting down your poem. Thanks for reading, my friend. Liz...thanks so much..glad you like this. And, thanks for missing me...I've missed you too. Kielo...your replies always bring a smile to my face. Thank you. Kacy...glad you enjoyed. Thank you, friend. Melissa...thank you. Wonderful to see you here again. Rhonda...you're such a good kid...lol. Thanks for always making me smile. LR...LOL...thanks for the smile today, and thanks for reading. Karen...have I mentioned that I love you to pieces? Well, I DO! Thanks for teaching me how to 'paint'..*grin* You're the best! Gale...really glad you enjoyed this one. It's SO good to be writing again! Marge...thank you, friend...good to see your name here. Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks again, everybody! Love and hugs to you all, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-14-2003 03:37 PM).] |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
This is just such an exquisite piece. Delicate and soft like the butterfly fluttering by. ***Ivy Rose |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
on wispy air as ribbon fallen from the hair in gentle twirl of finger's curl in constant whirl of wind a dream unfurled no more a dream...reality a heart has found serenity and wayward leaf is come to rest upon the chest of Mother Earth who knows its worth and that of butterfly who flutters by on wing of gratitude... ============================== well you already know the moth LOVES this one..wonderful word play and imagery... rhymes divine...your muse is flying pretty in this gem of pen..lovely write poetess Vicky-girl. Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Vicky, Vicky, Vicky... this one's my favourite. You are the queen of iambic, ya know? Haha... this one flowed so wonderfully and the fact that you had such a disordered line size really gave it that free-like-the-wind sort of feeling. This is a great example of poetry whose format is consistent with its subject matter. I'm really impressed... Adding it to my library as one of the best I have read from you, Vick... or from anyone for that matter. Awesome work... Brian Faith is a fine invention |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
click |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed it a lot |
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