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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2003-07-09 09:29 AM


Left Unsaid




It's the right touch
needed
that brings me
back to you
the mind in morning
seeded
that plants the wake
of do

In later rounds
the fight of heat
the kind
that sweats the mind
passes me
to hands of you
in softness feel
to find

It's the right touch
bearing
that downs my
thoughts to you
the unsaid words in
sharing
that tense the past
of blue

Today is yet
tomorrow's deeds
when uttered loud
in heard
the presence of
the past in thought
of you in
written word.



"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-07-09 09:43 AM


Today is yet
tomorrow's deeds
when uttered loud
in heard
the presence of
the past in thought
of you in
written word.


Hi Maureen  
It's good to read you this morning. And
this is an excellent write, as usual.
Hugs
Ethel


Kethry
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2 posted 2003-07-09 05:14 PM


nakdthoughts,
loved the "today is yet tommorrow's deeds" even though the rest of the poem gave me a sense of melancholy.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Patricia
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3 posted 2003-07-09 07:58 PM


Maureen,

This is so lovely.  So glad I stopped by to see you!


Patricia

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-07-09 08:01 PM


Maureen:
you know, I feel like this when I read my journals . . .EXACTLY

Yep, *shaking head*
awesome job
xxoo

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2003-07-09 08:01 PM


Quite clever the wordplay you chose...
As always deep and heartfelt. TD

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2003-07-09 09:41 PM


thoughts to you
the unsaid words in
sharing
that tense the past
of blue

very well written and felt over here too

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-07-10 01:24 AM


always enjoy your words M
nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2003-07-10 11:21 AM


Ethel, thank you for stopping to read. I am beginning to bore myself with my own words.

Kethry, melancholy is the right word.
hugss
nice to see you
M


Patricia thank you for doing so.

littlewing, sometimes I guess words are better left unsaid although it doesn't make one understood any better. Thank you
M

ThisDiamond, *s thank you for noticing

inkedgoddess, well I am in the blue most of the time,lately.

Dixie, thank you
hugs


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