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Good Girl Gone….Bad
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Good Girl Gone….Bad |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Good Girl Gone….Bad it’s not so much I wish him ill just want him to know a bit of how I feel for what I once knew crumbled down to dust when I walked over the thin line of trust I am a dry desert of blowing sand never once crossing his mind he didn’t understand did he not see me broken empty in this void unspoken things gone once precious now destroyed and I wish now that he is in her arms he sees my eyes thinking of my charms and when he touches lips it is mine he will kiss for he needs to see what it is I miss and it could be true I am inside out in tilt and not acting myself but I feel no guilt and I can see him tossing in his sleep thinking what he had and tomorrow I’ll be better I am just a good girl gone….bad "if you keep looking back, you are going to miss your whole life" Unknown |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Bravo Lady!  I am inside out in tilt and not acting myself but I feel no guilt Beautiful words coming from that pen!  Tima |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
its a sweet and sour feeling reading your work...its beautifull but being the man on the other side of what you write...it sucks...lol...kidding aside i love it... mike |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Excellent writing. Just be careful of that for which you wish. You could produce these things but the rule of three may bring a higher price than you expected. *smile* The difference between revenge and vengeance is the heat at which the dish is served; both mat have the same ingedients. Vengeance is served hot right from the oven which cooked it; it usually burns all it touches even the preparer. Revenge is dessert for the patient; it is a dish best served very cold. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I loved the bitterness in this. This is different, for you. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Helen, Is that called tender revenge? Nicely done... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Good girl gone? Ok . . . Bad? Don't be too hard on yourself. A brave piece, this. w.a.g. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
So good! I do know this all too well. This one truly touched me with understanding words. Fabulous write! Patricia |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Helen: ya know . . . ithink this every single day and have come to the conclusion that they are the ones missing out and one day they shall awake and realize exactly what they have given up or misused . . . Good girl - gone bad? Maybe . . . I like to think that I have one angel on one shoulder and two devils on the other I wish I had written this myself xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
As long as you're a bad girl when it counts..oops did i think that or say that out loud..lol |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"but I feel no guilt" ...and that is the best part of all. You go girl! Enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am a dry desert of blowing sand never once crossing his mind Excellent work... and the sad thing is... sometimes they do think of us more in their new lives than they ever did before discarding us. *S* |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ty all glad you stopped by...h |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
First things first...love the picture! And as for him? Yep, let him have a bit of the hurt... Enjoyed the write.. Susan C. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
First of all, you're a natural beauty! I love your new photo! Next, I'd like to say that I understand where you're coming from and that you did one fine job of expressing those emotions! Boy, did you ever!  In time he may realize that the green grass might very well have been growing over a septic tank! At least we leavees would like to think so! LOL  EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And I? Seem to be a bad girl gone...good! shaking my head...we have to cut this out, HELEN!!! LMAO... But seriously? There's pain in this. You just keep on being yourself. Others will always have an opinion as to good and evil. And you KNOW what I have to say about that!  |
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