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While my pen gently weeps
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While my pen gently weeps |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Light the loss let it burn Like skin held pinching for reality I have seen intelligence smoke signal for raw emotion Ash fallen over white trimmed trust Dust off traces memorised I am human remains Write your words blow me out. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"I am human remains" ah... scary pictures Good poem. (It scared the heck out of me)I heard somewere that too much shivering can lead to brainfreeze. Brr... I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Whew...! Intense reading. Excellent! Eric |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
LIz, serves you right for making me shiver too much today! brain freeze? i've got mind body and soul freeze. you're mental and i love ya! Ericc, always good to see you, glad you enjoyed, yep intense feelings indeed, taking over my life it seems. aaargh! thanks for the reply.  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
"Did she want me to change? but I change for good.... Don't you shiver...shiver..." brainfreeze  [This message has been edited by Wind (07-06-2003 06:14 PM).] |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
... intense  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Ah ha! now i understand. cold play. ah it all makes sense. ironically, i was listening to them at the same time..sparks.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
hmm I'm singing while my guitar gently weeps  love this gem....If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
we're nuts, aren't we? I want to be the peanut I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Ishmael Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 51 |
It does read as a gentle weeping... Nice Ish |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I am human remains . . . indeed indeed . . . blowing my mind gem and umm I already tossed my pen out at your last write . . . xxoo |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
But I've been trying to get out of this thoughty mood.. ah well.. Very powerful indeed. Pepper |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a very gentle weeping I feel brushing against my heart here gemma gal |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
"I DON'T KNOW WHY NOBODY TOLD YOU HOW TO UNFOLD YOUR LOVE, I DON'T KNOW HOW SOMEONE CONTROLLED YOU, THEY BOUGHT AND SOLD YOU. I LOOK AT THE WORLD AND I NOTICE IT'S TURNING, WHILE MY GUITAR GENTLY WEEPS. WITH EV'RY MISTAKE WE MUST SURELY BE LEARNING; STILL MY GUITAR GENTLY WEEPS." George Harrisson. Thanks for the replies, this song did indeed give me my title, and like he says, with every mistake, we must surely be learning. i hope so. much love to you all |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Gemma if I can offer words of wisdom "My cats breath smells like catfood" ~Ralph Wiggum Very powerful words, hope they lead you through this..  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Simply awesome !! hugs, Chris "Said you'd give me light... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
he heeeee. you know i love that quote! ok i'm laughing, well done.  mmmmmmm catfood.Ralph: My parents wont let me use scissors. Miss Hoover: The children have a right to laugh at you, Ralph. These things couldn't cut butter. Now.. take out your Red Crayons. Ralph: Miss Hoover. I don't have a red crayon. Miss Hoover: Why not? Ralph: I ate it. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
That's a good song...and yes- you guys are nuts too. best quote ever: "my mama used to tell me, life is like a box of chocolates: you never know which one you're gonna get" -forrest gump that and "we all live in a yellow submarine" every day I ask myself "why?" "why is it yellow and not blue?" Just some of my thoughts I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Lisa: All I found were these oozing berries, they look pretty poisonous Ralph: I ated the purple ones...oooooh Bart: How do they taste Raph? Ralph: They taste like...burning |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Inspired write, Gemma.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Inspiring write! Captivating, soft in hard core. TD |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I love this.... you capture an emotion that is truly hard to catch. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou again for your wonderful replies. i ated the purple ones. he heeee classic. yeah, why not blue? If i ever live in one, i promise i'll make it blue. love ya alllll, u make me laugh and smiiiile. |
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